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    Kaito Jin
    Konoha Academy Student
    Konoha Academy Student

    Posts : 287
    Ryō : 2431
    Join date : 2010-06-26
    Age : 24
    Location : In Konohagakure RPing with Jose, Rotoka.

    Shinobi ID
    Village: Konohagakure
    Letter Rank: D
    Classification: Jin Clan

    Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Kaito Jin on Sun Jun 27, 2010 3:29 am

    ~General Information~

    Name: Kaito Jin

    Nickname/Alias:Kaito, Jin, Kin.

    Weight: 64 kg (67kg with clothing)

    Height: 176 cms

    Age: 17

    Gender: Male

    Appearance:
    Spoiler:

    Kaito has very tired eyes that also have the sharingan activated that will look deep into you. His hair goes down to his mid eye level and has a natural hair color of grayish white. He has 2 scars on each side of his face that go up to his mouth. His eyes are orangish-redish and have a deep but small pupil. He is very muscular, and trains everyday for the fights to come. He always carries his sword that he recieved from his father's death bed. It is named

    Clothing: Kaito wears a bluish headband, a white muscle shirt that goes down to his waist, that does really show his chiseled body, and over top of that, he wears a blue coat with many things attached under it; A sashay that goes around his waist, almost like a chainmail that would protect him from certain things, a double beaded necklace that hangs down just under his collar bone, and black belt to hold everything together. His coat is made purely out of fox fur, that was shot and hunted by his grandmother. Under everything, but above the belt line, lies a very light, but durable black cloth that goes down to his feet and are tied into position. Over top of that, he has a bit of a skirt that goes just above his knee joints. For his feet he wears the classical ninja styled shoes that make a taping sound whenever he moves. He positioned the village protector around his right arm, the swinging arm, so that everyone that falls before him heads the power of the mist swordsmen. On the back of his small skirt-like piece, he hold the sheath to his sword going at an angle with the hilt of the blade pointing to his right elbow. This allows him for quick useage of the sword in ambushes, or for ambushes.

    Additional Outfits: The casual black ninja outfit, basically his under garments that consists of: A black tee-shirt that tucks into his ninja black pants tied with a black belt that isn’t long enough to reach the ground, and black sandal shoes that cover his foot and a bit of his ankle. With the village protector around his right arm. Assassination Casual.

    A blue shirt that covers his chin and goes down just above the middle of his thighs, black shorts that go down to his shins, and sandals that are taped up until the ending of his shorts. With the village protector around his right arm. Village casual.

    Striped shirt, and striped shorts with no shoes, but a village protector around his right arm. At home pajamas.

    Personality: Kaito is a very quiet person, he only talks when he needs to, and doesn’t say anything that is useless. He is very smart, passing 96% of his tests, studies very hard at home. When he is serious, he is usually trying not to laugh, or just really pissed off. It takes a lot to get him mad, motivated, or excited. He sort of likes little kids, because the older kids aren’t mature or are mean to everyone else. Kaito is very mature, he does not like immature little brats, and does not like being talked down to, and hates people who do not know their own, or Kaito’s position. He does not like to fight, and is very lazy most of the time, sleeping, or not up to very much. He always sits cross legged, and is always guarded. He is not depressed, infact, Kaito is a very nice person, often helping other people instead of fighting them, and accepts no rewards. He isn’t rich, but he isn’t poor, he gets free food from some people because he is so nice. He doesn’t like team missions, but he will not argue about them. Kaito tends to take responsibility and usually is the leader in his teams missions. Kaito exceeds as the second in command for the mist ninjas.
    ~Clan Information~

    Clan Name: Uchiha Clan

    Kekei Genkai: Sharingan

    Clan Symbol:

    Clan History: [link]http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Uchiha_Clan[/link]

    Ability Summary:
    Spoiler:
    e Uchiha clan were most feared for their powerful Sharingan, a kekkei genkai which gives them the ability to see the "colors" of chakra, allowing them to analyze and copy their opponent's skills, along with a number of other abilities. Only a select few members of the Uchiha clan manifested the Sharingan. Due to their natural affinity for battle, and their proficiency with genjutsu, many ninjas considered it more tactically favorable to flee rather than face an Uchiha shinobi in one-on-one combat. Among the techniques granted by the Sharingan, the Izanagi is deemed to be forbidden, due to it rendering the user blind in exchange for temporarily turning their personal reality into an illusion. Though the clan was feared for their Sharingan, the eyes have also been transplanted into various characters outside the clan.

    ~Rank/Village Information~

    Classification:Swordsman of The Mist

    Letter Rank:A

    Village:Kirigakure

    ~Skill Information~

    Skill Specialty: Kenjutsu, Genjutsu

    • Main: Kenjutsu
    • Sub:Genjutsu

    Elemental Affinity:

    • Main: Lightning
    • Sub: Water

    Special Characteristics: The ability to shoot lightning into his sword as fast rates and the ability to have super fast reflexes. When Kaito pulls out his sword, there is a rather "shocking" aura that surrounds him. This aura lets him move up to kage speed in three stages. 1. Is the lightning release Jutsu. 2. Is cutting his thumb with his charged blade. 3. Is unlocked by standing on a body of water and using the technique "Lightning Death" To power all of his cells electrons to super activate making him move at unbelievable speeds. (lasts for 3 of Kaito's post)

    ~Jutsu~

    [center]Lightning Blade Techniques


    Name:Ririsuraitoningu (Lightning Release, 雷リリースの)
    Rank:C+
    Element:Kenjutsu, Lightning
    Description:Kaito unsheathes his sword and says the technique name. As he says this, Lightning starts to infuse with the blade that he is holding. When he attacks someone with this infused chakra, they will have a chance that they will be paralyzed. The higher the rank for Kaito, the more chance for paralysis his enemy has. If their ranks are different with Kaito having the advantage, then there is a 65% rate, if Kaito is weaker then the enemy, he will have a 25% rate. If both are the same rank, then it is a 50% rate of paralysis.

    Name:Surasshu kaminari no (Slash of Lightning, スラッシュ雷)
    Rank:C
    Element:Kenjutsu, Lightning.
    Description: Kaito, when his blade is charged and he calls out the name of this technique, a wave of lightning will shoot out of it, taking the current charge off of his sword. The higher the rank, the more range and damage recieved for his enemy.

    Name:Kaminari shotto (Lightning Shot, ショット雷ショットを実施)
    Rank:B
    Element:Kenjutsu, Lightning
    Description:Kaito points his charged sword at the enemy, and says Kaminari Shotto. This will then shoot a ray of lightning towards any metal on the enemy. If the enemy is in range, and about 4 feet away from Kaito, it will peirce through almost any substance that is unguarded by chakra. If his is out of the range, then it will thest hit the conducter, and continuously zap the enemy, making them drop the weapon. Range: 6ft, Pierce: 4ft.

    Name:Shiki wa, shotto (Conducting Shot, 雷死、天から伝導)
    Rank:B
    Element:Kenjutsu, Lightning
    Description: When Kaito scatters pieces of conductors, (Metal projectiles, etc.) he can then blast the charge off of his weapon, and the charge will blast through each piece of metal making a web structer. If Kaito's enemy is in the middle he will recieve every zap if there is a conductor on him. If he is not in the middle, but somewhere in the web, it will still do damage, but not as much. The damage depends on how many conductors there are on the field, aswell as how many conductors there are on his enemy.

    Name:Ten kara dendo (Conduction from the heavens, ?????)
    Rank:B
    Element:Kenjutsu, Lightning
    Description: Kaito points the tip of his blade into the sky, no matter what the weather it is, his sword will be charged. The stormier the weather, the stronger all of his jutsu are. Kaito does this alot, usually when he is preparing for a giant strike, or just another kenjutsu attack.

    Name:Kaminari-shi (Lightning Death, 隠しミスト)
    Rank:A
    Element:Kenjutsu, Lightning
    Description: This is possibly the strongest Kenjutsu attack that Kaito has, When standing on water, Kaito can throw his charged sword into the lake, and every living creature on the lake will be fried. The only way to dodge this is to either have a lightning able body, or be able to jump long enough that the technique finishes. This is also a very big asset to Kaito's body, for he can charge all of his electrons in the atoms of his body to super activate, opening the third form of the speed, and move at unbelievable speeds. Kaito must be on water for this to affect him and his enemy. His enemy has to be on water, to be affected by this technique. (2 posts either way for the first attack, for the buff attack for kaito, 3 of his posts.)

    Genjustu Techniques


    Name:Gōmon (Torture, 拷問)
    Rank:C
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description: Kaito can make the user enter the torture genjutsu where they are strapped into a stretching rack that will slowly start pulling their limbs apart. This is used for getting information in the genjutsu as Kaito will enter himself and ask a question like: "What is your name, Who sent you. etc."

    Name:Sai riyō genjutsu (Reused Genjutsu, 再利用幻術)
    Rank:C
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description:Once inside the black space, the target will see grotesque figures said to be tortured criminals, the previous victims of the technique. These grotesqueries will reach out and grab a hold of the target. They will then be thrown into the void to the mercy of a spectral dragon. The horrifying oni can even extend from the targets own body to attack them.

    Name:Machigai da! (Wrong! 間違いだ!)
    Rank:C
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description: Kaito can change the looks of anything in his will to whatever he wants, confusing the opponent. This genjutsu does not consume hardly any chakra and Kaito can move around if he needs to. No hand seals are needed.

    Name:Tabi burakku yami ni gijutsu (Journy into the black darkenss, 旅ブラック闇に技術)
    Rank:A
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description: Tabi burakku yami ni gijutsu is a Genjutsu technique which causes the ninja's opponent to be enveloped in total darkness. While in the black void, the ninja will be unable to see any incoming attack or threat from any outside forces. Kaito is not allowed to move but any teammate of his is able to attack at their will.

    Name:Chikei chenjā (Terrain Changer, 地形チェンジャー)
    Rank:C
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description:Kaito, using a bit of chakra, and unable to move, can change the terrain of anywhere he wants from up to a 1km radius, he can make them walk in circles, or even go backwards. This is especially helpful for driving people crazy and tiring them out.

    Name:Iryūjon ryūsei (Illusion Meteor, イリュージョン流星)
    Rank:B
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description: When Kaito makes eye contact with his enemy, he can make them think that they are trapped and cannot move while a giant flaming meteor is coming and hits them head on, and burning them alive. Kaito cannot move when using this genjutsu and must prepare a bit of chakra.

    Name:Zassō no ketsugō (Binding of the weeds, 雑草の結合)
    Rank:B
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description: Kaito can make the user think that they are stuck and cannot move by attaching little prickly itchy weeds take over their feet and lower body. Kaito cannot move but his allies can. Kaito must look into their eyes for this jutsu.


    Name:Ki kui no ketsugō (Binding of the wooden Stakes, 木杭の結合)
    Rank:A
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description:When Kaito catches the enemy in this genjutsu, they will be unable to move because 5 wooden burning stakes will peirce their body in place so they cannot move. Kaito can then get his teammate to kill the immobile person with the extent of kaito's chjakra


    Name:Gyaku iryūjonmirā (Reverse illusion mirror, 逆イリュージョンミラー)
    Rank:A
    Element:Genjutsu/Sharingan
    Description: If Kaito gets trapped into a genjutsu, and realizes it, he can activate his tomoe 3 sharingan to switch locations with the enemy and counter them with their own genjutsu.


    Name:Bijon kako no jigoku kara! (Vision from the past, Hell! ビジョン過去の地獄から!)
    Rank:A
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description: Kaito can look into their eyes to bring back visions of the enemies loved ones being tortured, ripped apart, or even attacking/eating each other.


    Name:Nehan Shouja no Jutsu - Temple of Nirvana Technique
    Rank:A
    Element:Genjutsu
    Description:Nehan Shouja no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that allows the caster to place a large body of people into a unconscious state. The target can avoid the spell by forming and using the dispel skill.

    History/Background Story:
    Young Child Ark: From a very young age Kaito was enrolled into the mist academy student school, he was neglected to training all day and was showed no respect of love from either of his parents, not even from the teachers. This is because Kaito's birth was actually a genetic defect when his dad, a missing Konohagakure member who had complete control of the sharingan who then married a mist ninja's women and had accidentaly passed the secret doujutsu down to Kaito. When the sun was down and training was over, he would return home and was usually beaten by his father or his mother from not doing well enough to there standards for a uchiha member, he would then eat the little rice that he had recieved from them, and then was sentenced the rest of the night to study. He was only given 2 hours of sleep, and in the morning was woken up at a very early time for more training then, school where he would, again get beat up and picked on being called the "Wannabe-Uchiha". When the great disease came over his village, almost everyone was masacred, that included his parents, and his teachers. Even when his father died, he cried, because that was the first time he had ever recieved anything. He received his fathers sword, No iryujonisutoburedo.

    Genin Ark: When Kaito graduated from academy school, he was at the age of 11. He still went home every day to study and train. He would get home and then practice with the sword as well as holding the sharingan eyes and eventually he was able to hold the first tomoe of the sharingan eye. He was no longer getting beat up and had more then 2 hours of sleep that he previously received, and instead filled those times with missions of helping out the elderly and doing cheap missions for food money. He gradually received more and more attention from the higher ups, and eventually became loved and liked wherever he went. He forgot about the bad times, that was before, Kaito actually thanked his parents every night for the strength he had received. It was at the age of 13, that Kaito wanted to become a chuunin, and it was that time of year already. So with that, explaining to the village peoples that he would eventually come back when he was ordained chuunin, and told them that he could be a great asset being an uchiha member and such. With all the good byes that he had received, he left for Konohagakure in search of the title Chuunin.

    Chuunin Ark: When Kaito reached the leaf village, he was brought to a run down ramen station that was called ichiraku ramen. It was old styled and tasted delicious. When he was used to the village and had a run down appartment, he decided to lurk around the village and ask about the chuunin exams. He was told that they were to happen in 5 days. Using those 5 days, he trained all day and all night mostly on aquiring the second tomoe sharingan, but he also practiced his other genjutsu and kenjutsu as well, he studied and made sure that everything was in great condition. He never was late for anything so he showed up about 1 hours early to the chuunin written exam selection. As the time passed, he was told that this exam was going to take a long time, but he was sure that he would be okay. The exam started on que, and as expected from Katio he finished in 43 minutes and 19 seconds, being the first one done, with 4 hours left over. He left the exam hall and walked outside, where he was ambushed by 2 ronin leaf ninjas. They asked him for money, and he just kept walking. "I don't have any money on me, I'm sorry..." Kaito said, it was true he did have no money. The older ninja then went for a kick to the stomach that was then blocked by Kaito's left hand very easily. "Why you!" The ninjas said as they started a barage of attacks on Kaito. However, they could not keep up to his skill, and eventually where to tired to go on, and just passed out on the side walk.

    It was the next day, and he was told that he was going to participate in the second last forest of death exam. The rules were to basically survive. The older rules, as Kaito read, where to get 2 different scrolls, but then it said that 3 ninja were recklessly attacked by one of the sanin ninja named Orochimaru, which in turn meant that they had to stop that activity. The rules for this one were to survive 4 days in the cruelest of the cruel climates, and activities. You could kill anyone in the chuunin exams. That, made Kaito sick. He entered 3rd, just walking, and decided to spend these 4 days just sleeping, after all, he had faced much more when he was younger and had to fend for himself. If only it was that easy though. On his second day, 2 ninja's approached him, the same ones that had passed out.

    "Hey, Hey, look what we have here..." The younger ninja said as they both dashed at the drowsy Kaito. One of them threw a kunai, which was easily dodged by a sway of the head from Kaito, and a kick from the second ninja going for the same place, the stomach. Kaito didn't move out of the way of the kick, instead he let it connect 100% power. He just looked at the older ninja then said:

    "You are REALLY, starting to piss me off..." Kaito said, grabbing his leg and using his muscular hands to shatter his bone as well as activating the second tomoe sharingan to scare off the other ninja. The older ninja shreaked in pain as Kaito shattered his ankle, and the younger ninja took off scared with what he has witnessed at this scene. With the older ninja on the ground, Kaito thought about what his father did to him, so he knew it wasn't right. He just absolutly hated it when people looked down on him. So, being the nice ninja that he was, Kaito picked up the ninja, and took care for him. They soon dropped out of the competition, and Kaito survived the harshness of the second exam.

    The third exam was a tournament, Kaito wasn't exaclty thrilled about this, he was sure that he was the strongest one there, but he decided to get it over and done with and asked to go first. as he did this, the biggest and strongest looking of the bunch stepped out, and challenged Kaito. Kaito took his challange and was sentenced to fight in 5 minutes.

    As he walked out to the arena, the stages where filled with crowds of hollering ninjas, and at the top of the crowd, was 3 legendary leaders. Kaito thought that he had to impress them, so in his first fight, he decided not to hold back. As the both contestants stepped out, into the center they were told that there were no rules, and that, killing was aloud. Hearing this rule, he again, felt sick that anyone should die just for a lousy rank.

    "Begin!" The counceller annouced, and the giant ninja dashed off against him like a bull to a red flag.

    Kaito dodged the first punch, and blocked the second one with his hand. He then used his shinshun jutsu to appear behind the big and brawny man, and broke both of his arms. He proceeded by almost snapping his leg when the crying ninja said "I give up!!!!" For he no longer could take the pain. Kaito was then told that he no longer needed to fight, as he would just end most ninja carreers for the rest of the ninja.

    Kaito, had passed the chuunin exams. He then left half an hour after being announced chuunin, and headed home to his country. As he was leaving the gates of Konohagakure, the Hokage himself came up to Kaito and asked him to stay a little longer. About 2 years longer. Kaito thought long and hard about it and then asked: "What for? We will activate the second element as well as the " The Hokage replied with, "Jounin Training..."

    This just brought a whole new level up to Kaito, without thinking any longer he said "I'll do it!"

    Jounin Ark: Kaito was all suited up for training with the Hokage, it was after all two years worth of amazing training. Kaito didn't record all of it down, instead he only recorded the just of it. Over the course of the two training years, he mastered his way of the sword, lightning, water, and even Genjutsu, until he was able to hold off against 2v1 jounins with using his 3 tomoe sharingan, and leading team missions. When his long and hard two years were over, he walked to the Hokage office, proudly knowing where everything was, and was just intime for the graduation ceremony for jounins.

    "These fine and many young ninjas, graduated from the hard teachers at the academy school, survived their way through the deadly chuunin exams, and fought for their rank at the tournaments that where held. These are ninja that have been trained directly from their students except for one fine ninja, whose name is: Kaito Jin!" the Hokage announced with excitement.

    Mist Swordsmen Ninja Ark:

    Kaito then proudly walked his way to the podeum, and everyone clapped. But that wasn't the thing that caught his eye, the one special thing that caught his eye was that there was a mist ninja in the room to the back. He could tell that this man was a mist because the way they had a moist feeling around them. Kaito approached him and he quickly introduced himself.

    "Hello, My name is Naet, and I run the Seven Mist Swordsmen, and am currently looking for talented and strong Mist ninja to join my cult of the seven strongest ninjas in the mist, but not only that, The seven strongest Swordsmen in the entire Ninja world, I am here to recruit you...Will you join me? Not only will you be a great addition to my team, but we will work to improve your skills in everything, including your sharingan." Naet said to Kaito.

    "Yes, I will proudly join you!" Kaito said, walking off with the other strong swordsmen heading back to the mist country where he would once again be reunited with everyone, during his long adventures Kaito accomplished three things: Go to Jounin rank, Unlocked the third tomoe sharingan, and improved his fightning abilities. Kaito was returning as a real ninja, possibly the second strongest one in the mist village.

    As he was entering the mist village, everyone there, proudly said "CONGRATULATIONS!!!" to Kaito and Kaito knew that he was at home. They fed him what ever they want for this night, and gave him what ever he needed, but he knew that he was going to have to tell them that he was, after all going to leave the village and travel with Naet to gather the rest of the swordsmen. So, he decided to go and talk to the mizukage directly and tell him that he was going to leave.

    "Mizukage-sama, I'm...I'm going to-" "I know already, Naet has already spoken to me about this...Please do not do anything rash and stay alive, for you will always be remembered as the genin who left this village for strength!" The Mizukage said as she interrupted Kaito.

    With that, early in the morning, Naet and Kaito met at the border of the Mist village, and set off. On their way, Kaito could only think of something and laugh, and this was the feedback he would get from the message that he left.

    "Whats so funny?" Naet asked Kaito.

    "Oh, nothing..." Kaito said chuckling picturing the letter he left at the gates that read: "Don't let anyone else get stronger then me, and when the time comes, I will return as a hero."


    Roleplay Sample: As Kato was walking through the forest, a slight gust came over and blew his mission scroll away. As Kato watched it fly away, he panicked and started to run after it. Although he came quite close, it just kept getting farther away every time. Thats when he thought of something, Ill use my water manipulation to encase it and soak it until its too heavy to float around So Kato did some hand signs and took the water out of his water bottle and encased the scroll. The scroll was finally unable to float away and landed on a cliff about 50 meters below him.

    He thought that it would be easy to just climb down but that wouldn't work because the cliff that the scroll was on was at a 100 degrees angle and if he missed he would surely fall to his death. He pondered for a very long time, and then it struck him, about 2 months ago, Kato saw 2 ninjas practicing running up trees. Kato did try it the night after he saw those guys but it deemed impossible. However, this time Kato had no choice, he was short on money and unless he completed this mission he would be unable to pay the rent for his apartment or for food. So Kato started to ponder about how he would go about saving the scroll without killing him self going down, and make it back to the top.

    No iryujonisutoburedo


    Name:No iryujonisutoburedo

    Rank:A+

    Owner:Kaito Jin (previously Joukashaiko Jin)

    Appearance:
    Spoiler:

    Length:139 cm

    Width of the blade: 1/2''

    Material: High Non magnetic carbon steel

    Weight: 1/2 lbs

    Abilities: Sends an aura of lightning around the user, and has a 3 set mode of complex to it. One of the seven swords foraged by Joukashaiko Jin, Kaito Jin's Father.

    Info: A very long high carbon steel sword, that is almost wheight less and has a very strong feel to it. it is perfect at all angles and is around 6 years old. Very good condition and is currently held by the user Kaito Jin one of the seven swordsmen of the mist. This sword will be passed down onto Kaito's successor and then will again be passed down onto their successor. It has a very nice aura to it, brining good luck and happy times to the weilder, and grows more affection to the user as well. It needs to be fed a little bit of chakra when it is unleashed or it will be in a very "Grumpy" mood and will not do everything that the user wants it to do. Overall one of the seven best swords in the ninja world.


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    Naethyn™
    Kirigakure Jounin
    Kirigakure Jounin

    Posts : 126
    Ryō : 2448
    Join date : 2010-06-24
    Age : 25
    Location : Florida, United States

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    Letter Rank:
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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Naethyn™ on Sun Jun 27, 2010 3:39 am

    A Few things that I am going to say before Zod or Revy or Val posts anything.

    1.) I would like you to fix it so that there are not any random spaces or break lines.

    2.) Seven Swordsmen of the Mist is not a clan, therefore you need to add a clan, whether or not they have a Kekkei Genkai

    3.) Explain how your sword can make you faster, or does it make your swings faster?

    4.) Your allowed Two Main Specialties and one sub, if Genjutsu is your sub please limit the amount of genjutsus you would have.


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    Konoha Academy Student

    Posts : 287
    Ryō : 2431
    Join date : 2010-06-26
    Age : 24
    Location : In Konohagakure RPing with Jose, Rotoka.

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    Village: Konohagakure
    Letter Rank: D
    Classification: Jin Clan

    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Kaito Jin on Sun Jun 27, 2010 3:52 am

    My sword does not make me move faster, it is the lightning in me that does. If you read it said that it shocks my electrons making them move and super active high speeds making me move way faster. It increases my reflexes, and the sword only helps thios by containing the lightning.
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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Naethyn™ on Sun Jun 27, 2010 4:04 am

    Change the Lightning Fast thing

    change your RP sample to something your going to post on average, no overly sized rp sample strictly to get approved.

    Everything is else is fine for me, Revy will go over everything else.


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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Kaito Jin on Sun Jun 27, 2010 4:16 am

    Done edited.
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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Naethyn™ on Sun Jun 27, 2010 4:18 am

    My approval....


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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Echo on Sun Jun 27, 2010 5:17 am

    Name:Kaminari-shi (Lightning Death, 隠しミスト)

    Needs a limit on how long it lasts



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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Kaito Jin on Sun Jun 27, 2010 7:24 am

    edited


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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Echo on Sun Jun 27, 2010 8:24 am

    Name:Furasshuban (Flash bang, フラッシュバン)

    Thats not a Genjutsu, it's a light element Ninjutsu.


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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Kaito Jin on Sun Jun 27, 2010 8:26 am

    edited
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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Echo on Sun Jun 27, 2010 8:29 am

    I approve.


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    Re: Kaito Jin Done!

    Post by Kaito Jin on Mon Jun 28, 2010 5:46 pm

    Can this be moved to the approved section? p's and q's :)


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