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    Post by Nocturne on Sun Oct 14, 2012 6:25 am


    Retrieving Ninja Profile.....


    Who... Am I?

      Name: Kaze Uchiha

      Nickname/Alias: N/A

      Age: 20

      Gender: Male

      Is that really me?

      Appearance: Kaze has spiky black hair and onyx eyes. When the sharingan is active, which it is most of the time, his eyes give off a dim red glow; a characteristic that is a trait of the doujutsu. His bangs hang both sides of his face to roughly frame his cheeks, and another that hangs between the other two is long enough to cover his nose. He wears a black suit and gloves designed to include materials that provide a measure of water resistance. Over the black suit is a red samurai-like armour, an armour commonly used by earlier generations of shinobi. This armour was constructed from numerous metal plates, formed into multiple protective guards along his body, in particular: chest, waist, shoulders and thighs. His clan's crest is displayed on the back plate. The armour is durable enough to withstand assaults from weapons such as kunai, shuriken, and senbon. A sword is strapped horizontally to his waist for close-range combat, while his gunbai is carried on his back, a weapon that can be used for both offensive and defensive combat. He wears black pants with a weapons pouch strapped to his waist. He has bandages on his arms, under which Kaze wears special bracelets with seals where he stores shuriken, and a necklace with three metal tormoe on it. When not wearing the armour, he chooses to wear the standard Uchiha outfit: a high-collared black shirt, also made up of water resistant materials, with the clan's crest on it's back and black shorts. The shorts have two extra pockets from the upper pair large enough to hold up a single small scroll. The weapons pouch is generally present no matter which of the outfits he is wearing.

      Clothing:

      Weight: 130 lbs

      Height: 5'7"

      Ethnicity: Japanese-Caucasian

      Voice:

        Likes:
      • Power
      • Scythes and shuriken
      • Fighting
      • Dumplings
      • Relaxing

        Dislikes:
      • Weakness
      • Failure
      • Disrespect
      • Spoiled brats
      • Senju Clan


      Personality: Personality wise, he can be somewhat arrogant and vain. Kaze has a habit of being overly dramatic and giving long speeches. By nature, He is a prideful and adamant member of the Uchiha Clan, believing that he deserves more respect than he is given. Kaze is a battle-loving fellow and highly favors wars simply because of the many, many opportunities it poses to test his own skills. As he sees it, challenges provide a method of improving his physical capabilities and comparing that skill to those of the shinobi world.

      Given his other traits, he does not succumb to the excitement of battle. Despite a few negative personality traits, one positive aspect is his devotion and persistence to succeed in his goals. No matter how treacherous or worn the journey gets, he will follow the goals he set till he succeeds or death meet him along the way. He possesses some self-control of his emotions; remaining silent when provoked by others or biting his tongue during a rant. Kaze retains some respect to his elders, but at a higher level for those who hold certain titles such as Rikudou Sennin and Madara Uchiha. However, he holds a lesser degree of respect to the Uchiha Prodigies due to their failure to protect his younger brother, Mayuri, as well as a teardrop of hatred towards Nobunaga Uchiha. He tends to only be surprised when opponents prove more powerful or skilled than he expected. Even then, he retains a sense of arrogance to a point that death may lie ahead.

      My...Family?

      Clan: Uchiha


      Unique Clan Features: Sharingan - Copying Wheel Eye (Uchiha Clan) The Sharingan's abilities consist of two parts: the "Eye of Insight" (洞察眼, Dōsatsugan) and the "Eye of Hypnotism" (催眠眼, Saimingan). The first of the Sharingan's powers is being able to see the flow of chakra. The Sharingan can tell if a person is under a genjutsu because the person's chakra flow would be irregular. The Sharingan's second-most prominent ability grants the user an incredible clarity of perception, allowing them to easily recognise genjutsu and different forms of chakra, though not to the same extent as the Byakugan. This also allows the user to pick up on subtle details, enabling them to read lip movements or mimic something like pencil movements.

      As the Sharingan evolves, gaining more tomoe seals, this ability extends to being able to track fast-moving objects before finally giving some amount of predictive capabilities to the user, allowing them to see the image of an attacker’s next move from the slightest muscle tension in their body and counterattack or dodge without any wasted movement. However, even though the user may be able to see an attack or know it is coming, their body may not always have time to react.

      The Sharingan's third and most well-known ability is that it grants the user the ability to memorise almost any technique that he or she witnesses, apart from other kekkei genkai techniques. The user can memorise ninjutsu, genjutsu, and taijutsu with near perfect accuracy, allowing the user to use the techniques as their own, or even modify them to create their own new techniques, much like Sasuke Uchiha's Lion Combo. In order to reproduce a copied technique, however, one must have the necessary skill or ability to perform them. A prime example is Rock Lee's brand of taijutsu. While Sasuke was able to copy some of Lee's moves, they put a much more significant strain on him since he hasn't trained nearly as much as Lee has. In addition to physical skill and kekkei genkai techniques, the Sharingan cannot reproduce techniques dependent on other factors, such as summons that the user has not signed a contract with.

      The Sharingan's final commonly-used ability is capable of inducing a unique brand of hypnosis that involves suggesting actions and thoughts to the opponent through genjutsu cast by simple eye contact between both parties. More advanced Sharingan users can take the hypnosis ability even further to the point where a powerful summon like Manda or even the Nine-Tailed Fox may be controlled. When this was used against Manda and the Nine-Tailed Fox their eyes took on the tomoe pattern of the users' Sharingan while under hypnotic influence.

      The hypnotic ability coupled with the other aspects of the Sharingan, can make the user appear as if they can "see the future". First, the user must perfectly mimic every move their opponent makes and possibly their thoughts and words through careful observation. Then, they suggest an action to the opponent such as hand seals for a technique that the opponent and Sharingan user already know and copy that. With these things done, the user can complete the action even before the opponent does, possibly using the Sharingan's genjutsu to confuse or delay them. As with other genjutsu, genjutsu cast by the Sharingan are capable of putting an opponent to sleep, inducing paralysis, replaying memories to someone else, or creating various illusions to deceive someone. The potency of the Sharingan's illusion is dependent on the user's knowledge and skill with implementing genjutsu.

      In addition, more rarely used by the Uchiha clan, the Sharingan can allow the user to perform a unique type of genjutsu Izanagi. Using Izanagi, the user can warp reality for a short amount of time, changing reality into illusion and illusion into reality. Although to perform this technique, the user must have the DNA of both the Uchiha and Senju clan. However, this technique has been labelled a kinjutsu, because its use causes the eye that performed Izanagi to close forever.

      Although the Sharingan consumes the user's chakra while active, the chakra levels that the user must exert is so insignificant that they can keep it active constantly. In fact, Itachi Uchiha was so masterful of it, he was able to keep it active for most of the time, only once deactivating it after using Tsukuyomi on Sasuke and Amaterasu to escape Jiraiya. However, when a Sharingan is transplanted to a non-Uchiha, the chakra drain is significant, leading them to cover it up when not in use, to stop the drain.

      Kaze's Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan:




      It's all coming back to me now..

      Classification: Missing-Nin

      Letter Rank: A

      Village: Konohagakure

      My skills were unmatched..

      Skill Specialty:

      Available Starting Points: 10


      • 1. Ninjutsu (Master)
        Like all the other Uchiha, Kaze utilizes the Katon Element, which he has a mastery in. For instance, he is capable of using Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique with such intensity that the flames become white.

      • 2. Kenjutsu (Artisan)
        Kaze is highly skilled in the art of scythes, as well as wielding a large gunbai as his weapon of choice. He can whirl and spin it rapidly, showing a great deal of proficiency and skill with it. He resorts to using a chokuto for close combat.

      • 3. Genjutsu (Novice)


      Elemental Affinity:

      • 1. Katon
      • 2. Fuuton
      • 3.
      • Comb.


      -Jutsu-

      E: -
      D: -
      C: 10
      B: 7
      A: 5
      S: 2
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      Uchiha Techniques
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      Name: Magen: Kyo Tenchi-ten (Demonic Illusion: Mirror Heaven and Earth Change)
      Rank: C-Rank
      Type: Genjutsu
      Description: Using the Sharingan's jutsu-copying abilities, the user can turn any genjutsu back onto its original user.

      Name: Gunbai Barrier
      Rank: A
      Type: Kenjutsu
      Range: Close (0m ~ 1m)
      Description: By channelling chakra through their gunbai, the user can generate a shield made out of chakra to defend both themselves and their comrades against incoming attacks such as projectiles and jutsu. When used to block S-Rank techniques, damage to the user is halved.

      Name: Amatsukami - Locked till Sennin
      Rank: S
      Type: Genjutsu
      Description: The technique allows the user to enter an opponent's mind and manipulate them by suggesting a false experience against their free will but will quickly subside shortly afterwards. It is also capable of negating any mental possession over others, including the user. This is possible due to the eye automatically triggering sometime after the enemy seizes control over the user's mind. The technique is performed by Kaze's left eye, and does not require direct eye contact. It can only be used twice a day.

      Name: Tenmei
      Rank: S
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Range: Close (0m ~ 1m)
      Description: During its usage, the technique creates a swirling, spatial distortion centered upon the right eye and warps away the user, or anything the user concentrates their mind on to a location within the user's field of vision.

      Katon (Fire Release)
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      Name: Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique
      Rank: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Monkey → Boar → Horse → Tiger
      Description: A technique where chakra kneaded inside the body is converted into fire, and expelled from the mouth either as a massive orb of roaring flame or as a continuous flame-thrower. The scope of the attack is altered by controlling the volume of chakra that is mustered. The released flames will engulf their target, and leave a crater on the ground's surface.

      Name: Fire Release: Phoenix Sage Fire Technique
      Type: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Rat → Tiger → Dog → Ox → Rabbit → Tiger
      Description: This technique creates a volley of small fireballs, which are sent flying in an unpredictable manner assaulting the enemy. In addition, the flames are controlled one by one with chakra, so avoiding them all is extremely difficult. Shuriken can also be concealed within the flames, creating an unexpected secondary surprise attack. Like the flames, the shuriken can be controlled with chakra. For the most part, however, this technique is used as a distraction.

      Name: Fire Release: Pheonix Sage Flower Nail Crimson
      Type: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Tiger
      Description: The user unleashes a volley of shuriken with one hand, while at the same time exhaling fire-infused chakra onto them in order to increase the weapons' destructive potential by making them capable of inflicting severe burns upon direct contact with either the intended victim or any other object caught within their trajectories. Due to the chakra-based nature of the flames that surround them, the shuriken will continue to burn after impact, regardless of the flammability of the object that they ultimately collide with.

      Name: Fire Release: Dragon Fire
      Rank: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Snake → Dragon → Rabbit → Tiger
      Description: The user breathes fire along a cord or any other type of long object, which rushes forward in straight line catching the enemy on fire. A line of enemies can be used as the conductor as well. The flames are meant to target, and assault the enemy's upper body just like a projectile weapon.

      Name: Fire Release: Mist Blaze Dance
      Rank: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Snake → Ram → Monkey → Tiger
      Description: After performing the necessary hand seals, the user is able to create and blow a flammable gas from their lungs. Once it comes in contact with fire or spark, the gas ignites into a large fireball.

      Name: Fire Release: Ash Pile Burning
      Rank: B-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Snake → Rat → Snake → Tiger
      Description: A Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After forming the needed handseals, the user will expel an ash from his mouth. This large cloud begin to envelope his foe and when the user clicks his teeth, the cloud will ignite in an explosion.

      Name: Fire Release: Fire Dragon Flame Bullet
      Rank: B-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Ram → Horse → Snake → Dragon → Rat → Ox → Tiger
      Description: The user kneads chakra into flames, which are then manipulated into a genuine-looking dragon. Since the art of having the flames obey the user's will is outrageously difficult, its mastery is restricted to a limited number of skillful shinobi. The spat out flames are divided to launch a left side, right side, and frontal assault in all three directions at once, turning the enemy into ash in a matter of seconds.

      Name: Fire Release: Great Dragon Fire Technique
      Rank: B-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Tiger
      Description: The user compresses a large amount of chakra built up inside their body and changes it into a dragon-shaped fireball. The user then skilfully manipulates that great fire, and attacks their opponent. Even outside of the attack range, its power and reliability are stressed. The flames have a high temperature, as they can create an upward movement of air currents which in turn can give rise to thunder clouds. A master of this technique can fire off several flames in succession and anyone caught in the technique could potentially be reduced to ashes.

      Name: Fire Release: Fire Shuriken Explosion
      Rank: B
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Tiger
      Description: Kaze inhales air via their mouth and gathers up chakra in his chest, then Kaze can fire several small shuriken-shaped fireballs at his opponent. The fireballs seem to be very accurately modeled after shuriken with fine detail. After making contact with a surface or object, the fireballs will explode into a fiery of flames. This jutsu is somewhat similar to a paper bomb, but much stronger.

      Name: Fire Release: Shadow Clone
      Rank: B
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: -
      Description: This technique allows the user to make a shadow clone infused with flames. Because it is a shadow clone, it is able to perform jutsu and interact with the environment due to it having physical substance. If the clone is injured, it will revert to its natural flaming-state, at the same time burning whatever it is touching.

      Fuuton (Wind Release)
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      Name: Wind Release: Great Breakthrough
      Rank: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Tiger → Ox → Dog → Rabbit → Snake
      Description: This technique creates a large explosion of wind from the user's location, easily leveling everything in its path. A variation of the technique involves a smaller blast of wind which gets ignited with flame.

      Name: Wind Release: Blade of Wind
      Rank: A-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Horse → Monkey → Bird
      Description: This technique is a pinpoint slashing strike, where the user emits chakra from their fingertips and materialises it into a transparant sword that assaults the enemy in a gust of wind and making a slicing sound.

      Name: Wind Release: Gale Wind Palm
      Rank: C-Rank
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: -
      Description: A simple technique that when the users hands are clapped together, wind is compressed and transformed into a powerful gale. This technique, when used as an isolated attack has the power to easily knock over a human. Though the true value comes from using it together with projectile weapons like shuriken or kunai. Their speed, power, and ability to wound or even kill are all increased several times.

      Name: Wind Release: Verdant Mountain's Violent Wind
      Rank: C
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Snake
      Description: By using wind-based chakra, the user can infuse their bladed weapons from a distance and manipulate them. The effect lasts for a maximum duration of two posts. It is possible to control up to only four weapons due to the concentration required to maintain them.

      Name: Wind Release: Dust Cloud Techinque
      Rank: A
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Horse → Monkey → Bird
      Description: This technique creates a stream of high-velocity wind containing dust particles, capable of decimating anything caught in it in only a matter of moments. The completed technique is directed through vertically overlapped hands that are placed in front of the user's mouth after forming the necessary hand seal. This technique was powerful enough to destroy one of Kakuzu's masked hearts in an instant.

      Name: Wind Release: Vacuum Wave
      Rank: B
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Rat → Snake → Horse → Dog
      Description: The user takes a deep breath and spins while exhaling, compressing the released air into a solitary blade of wind that covers a substantial area around the user, due to their circular motion. The resulting sharpened blast is large enough to slice through multiple targets located a significant distance from the user, causing grievous injuries amongst those hit, which may even prove fatal.

      Name: Wind Release: Vacuum Serial Waves
      Rank: A
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Rat → Snake → Horse → Snake → Dog
      Description: The user takes a deep breath and exhales several blades of wind at different angles, by rapidly moving their head in various directions. Its power can be dramatically increased when utilized in conjunction with extreme suction, such as that generated by the Baku. This jutsu is efficient enough to even cut through Susanoo's defense.

      Name: Wind Release: Vacuum Sphere
      Rank: B
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Rat → Rabbit → Dog
      Description: The user takes a deep breath and then exhales several small blasts of wind chakra in such a manner that they are dispersed over an expansive range, enough to make it difficult to avoid them entirely without taking any damage. Due to the properties of this technique, the expelled blasts are capable of piercing into and potentially through an opponent's flesh when they collide, in a similar manner to how bullets function.

      Name: Wind Release: Wind Cutter
      Rank: A
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Ram → Boar → Dog
      Range: Close (0m ~ 1m)
      Description: Kaze forces chakra to the hand and envelops his hand in wind chakra. The technique allows him to easily pierce through stone, and cause fatal injuries to his targets. He can also extend the range of the technique if needed. Due to its wind release nature, the force emits a slicing sound when used.

      Name: Wind Release: Wind Enhanced Tools
      Rank: C
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: -
      Description: The user exhales wind-infused chakra onto a weapon in order to increase its sharpness, range and lethality. For example, he or she can infuse a kunai to resemble a makeshift scimitar or (demonstrated in the anime only) infuse shuriken to increase their range and cutting power.


      This is my Story

      History/Background Story:

      Childhood Arc- When Kaze was younger, he used to like going to the park to play. Shinto Uchiha, his father, was a Jounin who works around the the village since he doesn't have a Genin Team. Kaze hoped he could be a ninja like his father when he got older someday. His mom is a Medical-Nin who works at the Konoha Hospital. On the weekends, Kaze's parents will sometimes take him to the park to play, go on a walk, or have a picnic. This is one of Kaze's favorite memories when he was a child.

      Academy Arc- Kaze joined the Konoha Ninja Academy when he was 6. When Kaze turned 7, his father discided his son was ready to begin his training. He not only did he improve Kaze's strength and agility, but he even taught Kaze the Great Fireball Jutsu. Kaze was able to succeeded in performing the jutsu in front of his father after only one week of training, surprising him. At that moment, Kaze finally received his father's recognition, and could proudly wear the Uchiha crest on his back. Two weeks later, Kaze graduated the Academy and became a full active Genin.

      Genin Arc- A few months after graduating to Genin, Kaze's uncle died in a S-Rank Mission. The day after his uncle's funeral, Kaze went to the woods and started smashing a tree with a Kunai. Kaze always had a really close bond to not only his father, but also to his uncle. After 3 hours, he had lashed out so much of his rage and sorrow at the beaten up tree, that he accidently unlocked his Sharingan. He quickly ran home and told his parents what happened. His father later on showed Kaze how to use and control his Sharingan. He quickly mastered the sharingan and showed excellent prowess in Katon and weaponry. Soon recognized as a prodigy, and successor of the Sharingan, he gained attention from the elders of the Uchiha Clan. The following year, Kaze passed the Chuunin Exams and became a Chuunin at 9.

      Chuunin Arc- Kaze was put in a unique team with two jounin, making a three man squad. He was always mocked at by the Jounin cause he was the only Chuunin in the squad, despite being known as a Uchiha prodigy. For their first mission the Hokage assigned them to a difficult mission that required them to hunt down a Missing-Nin in the Fire Country. They left Kaze in the woods as back-up, though they thought he wasn't going to be needed, it was their way of keeping him from battling. But hours later, the Jounin were all low on chakra and had no other choice but to call on Kaze. The rogue ninja was pretty tired out himself, but still had a lot of fight left in him. Having already unlocked his third tomoe, it wasn't too hard to finish the man off. A week passed and he eventually learned of a battle that was to take place between him and another prodigy named Rebecca Uchiha, learning of the details on the day of the match. Kaze entered the courtyard and assumed his position, eyeing the girl as she walked closer. He relaxed himself, aware of the consequences he would face if he chose not to fight her. But the fight didn't last long, because she refused to fight and he had no intent in beating her to a pulp. The elders quickly took hold of Kaze and escorted him away from the scene. He felt kind of sorry for her, despite there being nothing he could do.

      Kaze was able to gain the respect from his squad team and further recognized by the Uchiha clan elders. He was later taken out of the team and moved up to Jounin, becoming one of the youngest Uchiha jounin at 13.

      Purpose Arc- Kaze, now 16 years of age, started to realize that the clan was becoming very corrupt, so there was no point is tolerating with it any longer. A week later, after some thinking, Kaze decided to abandon his duties and leave the village. Leaving the village was rather easy until Setsu Uchiha and his weak ANBU assistant decided to intervene. But after a long struggle against the two ninja, he managed to gain the upperhand and was left with no choice but to slaughter them both. He immediately fled the scene and joined a criminal organization, known as the Akatsuki. He eventually left the organization to find his true purpose in the world and satisfy his desire to become stronger. While he had stayed in Amegakure, Kaze was targeted by Naizu Nimakee as the latter was interested in the secrets that lay hidden in the depths of the Uchiha clan. The battle ended in a draw, however, due to his sudden reliance on the mangekyou he sought to fix the one drawback that steals their blessed visual prowess. At some point after the encounter, he confronts Kiero Uchiha and had his younger brother's eyes transplanted into his own sockets. His mangekyou soon took a new form; and will forever see the light that outshines the darkness.


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    Re: Kaze Uchiha [Done]

    Post by Echo on Sat Oct 20, 2012 1:32 pm

    Expand more on your appearance, as well as personality. More so appearance.

    And starting with your Uchiha techniques, each one of them needs more description.

    Magen: Kyo Tenchi-ten (Demonic Illusion: Mirror Heaven and Earth Change)

    Reversing a Genjutsu is fine, but for a simple C ranked amount of chakra, that's not all too logical. Using the sharingans copy technique to reverse it, you'd have to apply the same ranked chakra as the Genjutsu. Since you're also a Novice in genjutsu, I'd say limit it to reversing B ranked techniques. A ranks as well, but only at the chakra cost of 2 A ranks, since you're style with Genjutsu would be sloppy.

    Gunbai Barrier

    Needs a lot more detail. Like what it can defend against, and the range of it's defense.

    Amatsukami

    It's a type of Genjutsu like Shisui's, but you're only a novice n Genjutsu. You wouldn't have much training at all in the Sharingans Genjutsu section.

    I suggest thinking of a new ability.

    Tenmei

    I'm not 100% sure about.

    Add more description to it, and some kind of restrictions, and we'll see.

    Wind Release: Blade of Wind

    'Invisible' is too invisible. Make it more noticeable.

    Wind Release: Verdant Mountain's Violent Wind

    Add a chakra upkeep per post, as well as how many can be manipulated at once.

    Wind Release: Wind Cutter

    Needs a little more description. 'Nearly Anything' stretches quite a bit.



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    Re: Kaze Uchiha [Done]

    Post by Nocturne on Sat Oct 20, 2012 2:19 pm

    Revy Izumi wrote:Expand more on your appearance, as well as personality. More so appearance.
    I took assumption the expectation was lower based off two other apps you've viewed. You probably know which ones I am pointing out. Pretty lazy of me. But anyway, I'll fix it later.

    And starting with your Uchiha techniques, each one of them needs more description.

    Magen: Kyo Tenchi-ten (Demonic Illusion: Mirror Heaven and Earth Change)

    Reversing a Genjutsu is fine, but for a simple C ranked amount of chakra, that's not all too logical. Using the sharingans copy technique to reverse it, you'd have to apply the same ranked chakra as the Genjutsu. Since you're also a Novice in genjutsu, I'd say limit it to reversing B ranked techniques. A ranks as well, but only at the chakra cost of 2 A ranks, since you're style with Genjutsu would be sloppy.
    The jutsu lacks a rank as it would originally be C-S or something like that. For that reason, and obviously because of my skill, it is C-Rank.

    Gunbai Barrier

    Needs a lot more detail. Like what it can defend against, and the range of it's defense.
    Gotcha! Yes, a range was not specifically placed. This canon tech already mentions what it can defend against, so please state what your expectation is?

    Amatsukami

    It's a type of Genjutsu like Shisui's, but you're only a novice n Genjutsu. You wouldn't have much training at all in the Sharingans Genjutsu section.
    I will like to point out the "Locked till Sennin" text located right beside the name.

    Tenmei

    I'm not 100% sure about.

    Add more description to it, and some kind of restrictions, and we'll see.
    Uhh... The restriction is there, Revy. The chakra consumption and etc. was not added because I felt it was obvious. Could you point out what you want?

    Wind Release: Blade of Wind

    'Invisible' is too invisible. Make it more noticeable.
    Well, the correct word would be "transparent" I guess. The jutsu is not truly invisible from it's appearance in the manga. In the series it is possible to "see" wind.

    Wind Release: Verdant Mountain's Violent Wind

    Add a chakra upkeep per post, as well as how many can be manipulated at once.
    No problem. "The effect lasts for a maximum duration of two posts. It is possible to control up to only four weapons due to the concentration required to maintain them."

    Wind Release: Wind Cutter

    Needs a little more description. 'Nearly Anything' stretches quite a bit.
    I agree on this one too. That makes it too chidori like. The edit includes "can easily pierce stone" to help the poor readers.
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    Re: Kaze Uchiha [Done]

    Post by Echo on Sun Oct 21, 2012 12:32 am

    Nocturne wrote:
    Revy Izumi wrote:Expand more on your appearance, as well as personality. More so appearance.
    I took assumption the expectation was lower based off two other apps you've viewed. You probably know which ones I am pointing out. Pretty lazy of me. But anyway, I'll fix it later.

    I have been a little more easy going with apps, but that was simply to pick things up. Now that more and more people are showing up and creating characters, the requirements are going to raise.

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    And starting with your Uchiha techniques, each one of them needs more description.

    Magen: Kyo Tenchi-ten (Demonic Illusion: Mirror Heaven and Earth Change)

    Reversing a Genjutsu is fine, but for a simple C ranked amount of chakra, that's not all too logical. Using the sharingans copy technique to reverse it, you'd have to apply the same ranked chakra as the Genjutsu. Since you're also a Novice in genjutsu, I'd say limit it to reversing B ranked techniques. A ranks as well, but only at the chakra cost of 2 A ranks, since you're style with Genjutsu would be sloppy.
    The jutsu lacks a rank as it would originally be C-S or something like that. For that reason, and obviously because of my skill, it is C-Rank.

    If it's C-S, just state so, it would count as one of your limited S ranked techniques.

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    Gunbai Barrier

    Needs a lot more detail. Like what it can defend against, and the range of it's defense.
    Gotcha! Yes, a range was not specifically placed. This canon tech already mentions what it can defend against, so please state what your expectation is?

    All it says is it can defend against ranged attacks. So if i launch a nuclear missile at you, you could block it? The description of the jutsu itself is what needs editing. The cannon technique stopped an A ranked, possibly even higher technique like it was nothing.

    Add description on what it is capable of blocking against. It's A ranked, so I'd assume other techniques of equal power.

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    Amatsukami

    It's a type of Genjutsu like Shisui's, but you're only a novice n Genjutsu. You wouldn't have much training at all in the Sharingans Genjutsu section.
    I will like to point out the "Locked till Sennin" text located right beside the name.

    As a Sennin it'd be fine, but the skill itself needs to be changed up a little. You can basically mind control anyone by simply looking at them. That's just OP. You should at least need to make eye contact.

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    Tenmei

    I'm not 100% sure about.

    Add more description to it, and some kind of restrictions, and we'll see.
    Uhh... The restriction is there, Revy. The chakra consumption and etc. was not added because I felt it was obvious. Could you point out what you want?

    Well first, you are only able to warp to an area within your original field of vision? Meaning you cannot simply warp anywhere you want?

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    Wind Release: Wind Cutter

    Needs a little more description. 'Nearly Anything' stretches quite a bit.
    I agree on this one too. That makes it too chidori like. The edit includes "can easily pierce stone" to help the poor readers.

    Cut it back a little since it isn't Lightning. It can pierce stone, but not 'Easily'


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    Re: Kaze Uchiha [Done]

    Post by Nocturne on Sun Oct 21, 2012 2:18 am

    Revy Izumi wrote:
    If it's C-S, just state so, it would count as one of your limited S ranked techniques.
    I don't want it to count, yet anyway. So it will remain as it is.

    Amatsukami
    As a Sennin it'd be fine, but the skill itself needs to be changed up a little. You can basically mind control anyone by simply looking at them. That's just OP. You should at least need to make eye contact.
    "The technique allows the user to enter an opponent's mind and manipulate them by suggesting a false experience against their free will but will quickly subside shortly afterwards."

    I am simply suggesting a false reality instead of what really happened. It doesn't physically effect people or reality the way Kotoamatsukami does. I could tell someone that they gave me Ryo when if fact they didn't.

    Tenmei
    Well first, you are only able to warp to an area within your original field of vision? Meaning you cannot simply warp anywhere you want?
    I can only warp to a location that I can see. Say Kaze sees a pole on the ground, lying 20 feet away. It is possible to warp to it. Or send an object/jutsu to that location BUT not somewhere 5 miles away.

    Wind Release: Wind Cutter
    Cut it back a little since it isn't Lightning. It can pierce stone, but not 'Easily'
    With keen precision and force, I would believe it is possible. Wind chakra is focused on slicing whereas lightning is speed and vibrations.
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    Re: Kaze Uchiha [Done]

    Post by Echo on Sun Oct 21, 2012 6:36 pm

    Approved.

    Tenmei will be monitored heavily, consider this just a temporary approval for Tenmei for now. If there are no problems it'll stay approved.


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