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    Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Tue Oct 16, 2012 8:54 pm


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    Who... Am I?

      Name: Kamina Hyuuga

      Nickname/Alias: THE GREATES MANLY MAN

      Age: 27

      Gender: Male

      Is that really me?

      Appearance:
      Kamina or MR.HANDSOME is a rather handsome looking guy. He is a true manly man, manly-ness practically radiates from him andit makes other men feel sorry about themselves and how unmanyl they are. When it comes to manly-ness there is no other man who could be comared to Kamina. At all time he has a firm and manly pose which is so cool that even his enemies sometimes just stand there watching him standing or watching him as he kills them with his awesome skills and good looks. Yes, his good looks kills people, mainly females who suddenly die due to a serious blood loss. This is just how manly he is and why no other man should try to beat him in a test of manly-ness as they all would lose to him. Also, his manly-ness is the reason why females stay away from him, they know how manly he is and so they do not want to get caught by his manly-ness.

      Despite his manly-ness, the body of this God is that of a human, a quite tall human who just happens to be handsome. He has dark blue hair that just enhances the effect that his manly-ness has on people, specially in windy areas where his hair is blown by the wind thus creating an awesome scene that stops time for some people. His eyes are sparkling like diamonds, sometimes women want to pluck them out and wear them as jewlery. Indeed, they are more valuable than some rare stones as when he looks at women with them they suddenly faitfter getting a fever due to some unknown reasons. The fact that he wears no clothing makes it even difficult for women to act normaly around him, they always do weird stuff when they see his handsome upper body covered with tatto's.

      Although Kamina seems perfect in every single possible way, he is in fact not, he is far from perfection. Women do see him as Adonis or some other form of a divine deity, but he is actually still lacking certain things that make a God. Behind the bandages that hide his lower torso area from view, there is a terrible scar that ruins his good looks and so he always keeps it hiden. But, despite that, some women who have seen it, they started loving him even more. According to them, this scar makes him look even manly-er. But, that is impossible, he already is the manly-est man around so there could never be something that would make him even manly-er. Thus he still keeps hiding this scar as it could change the meaning of the word manly-est, thespite the fact that it is not a real word. Other than those previously mentioned stuff, there is nothing else that needs to be said about this man.

      Clothing:
      Due to the fact that he is from the Yuki Clan, Kamina does not wear any form of clothing, other than a red cloak, ninja sandals, Kiri headband around his arms, ninja pants and a pair of sunglasses. Everythign else is out of the question.

      Weight: 79 kg

      Height: 1.90 meters

      Ethnicity: White

      Voice: Manly, loud, somewhat annoying.

        Likes:
      • Killing people who enter his land
      • Snow and Ice
      • Making human statues
      • Killing innocent people
      • Being crazy

        Dislikes:
      • Water
      • ice using and/or rogue ninja
      • Spicy food
      • Sweets
      • Kids


      Personality:
      If you listen to what the people say about Kamina you will hear a lot of different stuff that are all true. One thing will always be exactly the same, all of them will tell you that Kamina is a crazy person who should be locked away for good. He isn't really crazy, but the stuff he does are what most people consider to be acts of madness, since they are all stuck p on abiding by the law and he isn't. This man doesn't give a damn about the law, he hates the law and most of the time he does stuff just because they are against the law. Not just the law, but any other form of rules that someone else placed upon him and other normal people. If some government dude made a rule that nobody can use a leaf and whistle with it, Kamina would do that, he would do it just because that government dude made such a silly rule. He has some sort of a moral and such of his own, but that depends from time to time.

      Another rather common thing that people say about Kamina is the fact that he is a douche and an asshole. That is true as well. He is an ass and a douche of the highes degree. If he doesn't like someone, he kills that someone, or he kills their entire family. It doesn't matter who you are or what you did, he will kill you, since that is who he is, a douche of the highest degree. Heck, even if you only have something that he likes, he will take that from you and maybe kill you. This is what makes him an asshole, he does things just so he could piss people off, instead of buying ice cream he will steal it, instead of boyung anything he will steal it, instead of dating a free chick he will steal someones wife or girlfriend and kill that someone while he is at it. Law, logic, rules...none of them affect the actions taken by this man, he does things for the lulz, just to piss people off and hence why he is A-Ranked.

      In a battle things might get somewhat different, but not always. Kamina isn't stupid and he isn't crazy, so he will not do stupid and completely crazy stuff that could get him killed. Even if he does something like this, he will try to make sure that he is safe, so using clones is a common battle tactic of this man. Even if he attacked someone stronger than he is, he wtill still try to prevent death, his own death, he will kill the other dude if he can. When it comes to people from Kirigakure, he doesn't kill, but he doest beat the shit out of them if they piss him off or something. If they don't annoy him, they get to stay as they are, otherwise they will get into a world of pain.

      My...Family?

      Clan: Hyuuga Clan [canon]

      Unique Clan Features: White eyes, completely white eyes.

      It's all coming back to me now..

      Classification: Seven Swordsman of the Mist member

      Letter Rank: A

      Village: Kirigakure

      My skills were unmatched..

      -Skill Specialties-

      Available Starting Points: Jounin 10/10


      • 1. Ninjutsu - Expert
      • 2. Taijutsu - Artisan
      • 3. Weaponry - Kenjutsu - Expert


      -Elements-


      • 1. Lightning
      • 2. Earth
      • 3. N/A
      • Comb. N/A


      -Jutsu-

      E:
      D: 2
      C: 5
      B: 3
      A: 3
      S: 0
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      Custom Jutsu
      Spoiler:
      Name: Gentle Fist Spiky Palm
      Rank: B
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: Spiky Palm is a technique similar to the Body Blow technique, except the user does not release the chakra from all of his Tenketsu, instead he releases it from some of them instantly in the form of ten centimeter long spikes that are sharp enough to pierce trees and deal a lot of damage upon impact with humans. The user can release these spikes from almost any part of his body and they will last for two turns, only then he has to restart the technique once more.

      Name: Gentle Fist Lightning Palm
      Rank: A
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: Lightning
      Description: This technique is just like the Vacuum Palm except the user releases a electrical current together with some of his pure chakra to deal a lightning based attack which shocks the opponent and paralyzes them for three turns, kills them if it heats a spot near the heart, lungs or the head. Also, due to the elemental chakra in this technique, it gains a weakness to wind attacks and an advantage over earth based attacks.

      Name: Sphere Shot Palm
      Rank: C
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: Sphere shot palm is a Gentle Fist technique where the user releases some of his chakra in the form of a small sphere that is only somewhat larger than their palm and sends it at the opponent in order to dear blunt damage. If it hits it will kick them back a couple of centimeters and it will cause a lot of bruising around the area where it hit, taking away their breath if it hits their stomach area.

      Name: Gentle Fist Lightning Quake Palm
      Rank: A
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: Lightning Quake Palm is a Gentle Fist technique where the user uses his Byakugan to detect a weak point of a technique or his opponent and strikes it with a powerful attack that neutralizes said technique or kills the opponent if it lands a direct hit. It is especially good against Water and Earth techniques, while not so effective when it comes to Fire and Wind techniques.

      Canon Jutsu
      Spoiler:
      Name: Eight Trigrams Mountain Crusher
      Rank: A
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: A more powerful variation of Eight Trigrams Vacuum Palm. The user hits the target at close range with a powerful wave of chakra. The attack sends them flying back into a rock or wall, crushing it and causing severe damage, killing them if it hits their head or their upper torso near the lungs or the heart.

      Name: Eight Trigrams Vacuum Palm
      Rank: B
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: This technique is similar in practice to Eight Trigrams Palms Revolving Heaven, but has a specific target rather than a general area. To perform it, the user precisely pinpoints the enemy's vital points with the Byakugan and releases a high-speed palm thrust that can pass ten meters within a second. A "vacuum shell" compressed using the Gentle Fist is formed to attack the opponent's vitals from a distance, blowing them off their feet with tremendous force before they even notice they were hit.

      Name: Gentle Fist Art One Blow Body
      Rank: B
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: Using their ability to expel chakra from every chakra point on their body, a member of the Hyūga clan can hit their opponent with a blast of chakra that will send them flying away from the user. When he was trapped by a Water Prison Technique, it was revealed that the user can also use this technique to target weak points that they see with their Byakugan in order to dispel it.

      Name: Eight Trigrams Palm Revolving Heaven
      Rank: C-S
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: A secret taijutsu that is orally handed down only within the main house of the Hyūga, this technique utilises the chakra control gained through Gentle Fist training to release a huge amount of chakra from all the chakra points on the user's body. Kamina learned it on his own through the applciation of his own knowledge about the Gentle Fist. It is also a defensive manoeuvre to compensate for the Byakugan's blind spot as the released chakra blocks any possible attack on the user. After releasing chakra from every tenketsu in their body, the user then spins rapidly to parry the attack, both creating a rotating shield of chakra around themselves and tossing away any nearby attackers. The user can also actively control the size and power of the sphere to suit the situation. This technique is only effective when rotating, since the chakra itself is not enough to stop a physical attack thus if they cannot spin, the user becomes vulnerable. Not only that, this technique works is higly weak towards Wind, Fire and Lightning attack since it cannot defend against them as they do not posses a phiysical form like Earth and Water techniques.

      Name: Gentle Fist
      Rank: C
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: The Gentle Fist (柔拳, Jūken) or Gentle Fist Art (柔拳法, Jūkenpō) is a form of hand-to-hand combat used by members of the Hyūga clan. It inflicts internal damage through attacking the body's Chakra Pathway System, subsequently injuring organs which are closely intertwined with the area of the network which has been struck. To do this, the user surgically injects a certain amount of their own chakra into the opponent's chakra pathway system, causing damage to surrounding organs due to their proximity to the chakra circulatory system. Even the slightest tap can cause severe internal damage, hence the name "gentle" fist.
      Targeting the tenketsu can enhance the havoc and control a Gentle Fist practitioner can impose upon an opponent's chakra network. These special nodes, 361 in total, are key gatekeeping interceptions in the chakra circulatory network, thus forcibly opening or sealing them in whatever manner the Gentle Fist user sees fit is a powerful tactical option to have. The user's chakra can either increase chakra flow in the opponent's body, or disrupt it completely, preventing them from using techniques.

      Name: Palm Bottom
      Rank: C
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: This attack consists of a quick, precise thrust of the users' palm to an opponent's body. Like other Gentle Fist techniques, it sends chakra into the target to cause internal damage which will temporarily paralyse an opponent fo 2 turns. "Shōtei" (掌底; Literally meaning "palm bottom") is short for "Shōteiuchi" (掌底打ち; Literally meaning "palm bottom strike"), a technique that is usually translated as 'palm heel strike' and basically consists of hitting the opponent with the thick part of the palm closest to the wrist.

      Name: Earth Release: Hide Like a Mole
      Rank: C
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: Earth
      Description: This technique changes earth into fine sand by channelling chakra into it, allowing the user to dig through it like a mole. This effect goes around the body (not just the hands), making it just large enough for a person to move through. The user can pinpoint where they are, despite being underground, by sensing the magnetic forces. They can also sense what is happening on the surface and use that information to launch a surprise attack on the enemy. One can also hide deep in the ground, escaping to a depth where the enemy can't reach. It also appears that after digging, the ground can be returned to its original state, leaving no trace of where the user entered the earth.

      Name: Chakra Needle Technique
      Rank: D
      Type: Taijutsu
      Hand Seals: N/A
      Element: N/A
      Description: After focusing chakra outside the body, it is then formed into needles and propelled at the target. By using Byakugan, this technique can be used to hit very small targets, such as bees.

      Name: Body Flicker Technique
      Rank: D
      Type: Ninjutsu
      Hand Seals: Ram
      Element: N/A
      Description: The Body Flicker Technique is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short to long distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily vitalise the body and move at extreme speeds. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance and elevation between the user and the intended destination.


      This is my Story

      History/Background Story:
      Birth
      Jack was born in a small village, in the Land of Thunder, one of five great nations. His village was very small, and it was surrounded by tall mountains, and large rivers. All people in that village were pour, and most of them had no food, or water. The village was ruled by a fat government official. He kept all food and money for himself, not giving anything to the villagers, and their families. Jacks parents were pour farmers, who served that fat man, and lived in dirt. Their house was small, and they had enough supplies, just barely to survive.

      After some time, the government official who ruled the land decided to make his own personal army, which he will use to kill the Daimyo of the Land of Lightning. But, he knew that nobody from that village was strong enough to become a ninja, or ready to help him. So, he decided to do something else. Knowing how the place was filled with little kids, he decided to take all of them, and raise them as his personal soldiers. For that, he had a couple of older shinobi who worked for him. They were once Jounin Sensei in the Cloud village, but now they were outcasts. Those two would do anything for a good pay, so that would explain why were they working for him. The attack was set up to happen over the night, while everyone was sleeping.

      During that night, the young Jack was somewhat 7 years old, sleeping with his parents. While his gentle blue eyes were closed, an explosion occurred in the near by area, waking up everyone in the village. When his parents heard this, the quickly woke up, dressing up themselves and their child. At the moment, they were only thinking about the safety of their son, not concerning about their lives. Jack was their priority, so they quickly dressed him up, placing him in his chair so they could tell him something. After a few minutes, the whole family came trough the door of their hose, running towards the forest. As they were running, they could see people being attacked by the forces of the government official, they were everywhere. Knowing that they did not have a chance to escape, the parents of the young boy sent their soon alone into the woods, with the instructions where to go. At that time, they stayed behind, stopping the bad guys to get near their soon. Without taking any seconds to look back, Jack entered the forest, disappearing out of sight.

      Academy
      After leaving the village, the young boy thought that his parents were dead, killed in the attack. Even so, he still hoped that they were still alive, even though that was not possible. He joined the Mist village academy wanting to get stronger and make everyone pay for what they did to him and his family. In the Academy he was always happy and friendly to people, getting many friends as he went on. Heck, even the teachers liked him. He kept his problems for himself, nobody else needed to know about his sad past. During his academy time he lived with his grandfather who died after he had became a Genin and after he found out how Jack's parents died. Soon enough he passed the academy and became a Genin. he was placed on a team and was given a Sensei.

      Genin
      After learning everything about each other, the young Genin squad was able to start doing combos like they could read each others mind. The bond between them got so strong that even their sensei could not believe how incredible it was. Even so, with their bonds reaching the highest level of friendship, the young Genins also started to get stronger. Not even a year had passed, and they were already able to perform B-Ranked missions on their own. At occasions like that, their sensei would simply step back from the mission, hiding in the shadow and watching them complete their missions perfectly. At some point tears would flow from his eyes after watching a perfectly completed mission, he was damn proud of them.

      In the squad they formed, Jacky was the sensory and ninjutsu expert. Since he was a such a good student and a quick learner, their sensei was the one who thought him most of his techniques, due to his connection with the seven swordsman of the mist organization. Since he was one of the members, the older Jounin was considered as one of the best Weapon experts in the village, which had a great influence on Jacky. From all the techniques and strategies which he knew, Jacky learned most of it from his sensei, who payed a lot of attention to him. Of course, he did train his other two students, but the young Jacky was his favorite student who he thought everything. As Jacky grew, his sensei was more and more proud of him, since he was becoming an exact copy of his sensei, minus the part where he wasn't much of a weapon user.

      Even thought they were one of the strongest Genin teams in the village, Jacky and his squad decided to skip the Chuunin Exam for that year and try out next year. The reason for that was their wish to complete more missions in order to visit more different villages and to meet more different ninjas from other villages, thus gaining more knowledge about their strengths and weaknesses. Respecting their wishes, their sensei supported them and he decided to train them even harder so they may become even stronger. Again, his fullest attention was directed to Jacky, who learned how to master even more Ninjutsu techniques, gaining his own style of weapon usage and his favorite ninjutsu type.

      Chuunin
      After a year, the day of the Chuunin exams finally arrived, they day which they were waiting for with so much expectation. The location of that Chuunin Exam was in Kirigakure, so the young Squad had the advantage of the area, since they knew the whole advantages and disadvantages of their Land and Village. Due to that, the first two exams, which were field exams, they passed with not so much problems. In that time, only Yuki, the female member of the squad got a small wound. Other than that, they were all fine, ready to continue. In the third round, Yuki fell out in a all out battle against a Genin from Kumogakure, who used Lightning against her Earth Techniques. Eventually, Jacky and his other team mate reached the final fight.

      In that battle, the skills of sensory and ninjutsus clashed with the skills of genjutsus and taijutsu. Till the end, the battle was undecided, favoring Jacky at some point. But, after the other young man activated his bloodline ability, Jacky went all out using his ultimate techniques. In the clash which followed, the battle ended in a tie, with both of them becoming Chuunin. Happy and sad, the young squad made a celebration for the Rank up of two of their member, together with the rank up of their sensei, who just became a ANBU. From that point on, they were destined to each take their separated ways.

      Jounin-Rogue
      After he gained the Rank of Chuunin, Jacky still continued to hang out with his friends form the squad, together with their sensei. Even so, they slowly started to distance and soon enough a gap appeared between them. The girl Yuki, who was the only one of them which failed the exam, she joined a new Genin squad. As for the other boy from the squad, he went on solo missions just as Jacky did. Even when they were assigned to do squad missions with other Chuunin, Jacky never ended up with his former squad friend. As for their sensei, he was so busy with his missions, that they never seemed to have time to spend together. So, the squad slowly started to fall apart. As for Jacky, now he had to train on his own and develop new skills on his own.

      Well, since he was used to train only when his sensei was around, this was quite hard for Jacky, who was 20 years old at that point. What ever he tried to train for failed and he was stuck at the same level, with no further development. Eventually, he stopped trying and decided to focus on his missions, just so he could gain more knowledge and experience. He was still young, so there was time to advance. The first few missions which he got were all high ranking ones, from B to A Ranks. All of them were quite hard, since at this point all the tasks Jacky had to do alone, without anyone to help him. Even though it was hard for him to do so, he knew that this was something that needed to be done. Soon, Jacky realized that he was focused too much on working in a team, that he even forgot how to fight on his own.

      But then he found out that the people who have killed his mother and fathere were actually in the same village as he was. Enraged by this he went to find them and kill them. After killing them he was made a Nuke-nin of A-Rank status, during the time when he killed him the Mizukage was just about to promote him to the rank of a Jounin. They young man quickly ran away from his village and he soon started a life full of hate, he completely changed, he even changed his name into Kamina Yuki instead of Jacky Yuki. Later on he returned to Kiri after everyone found out why he did such a thing and now he is still there.As a punishment he did get locked for a while and sealed as well.

      Roleplay Sample:
      Spoiler:
      The reaction of the female and her Hollow friend was just as it was to be expected, they were completely surprised with the way this man before them acted. Well, the female not knowing what a servant is, that was a tad weird. What he did was beyond their ability to comprehend, it was not something anyone would actually do. But, this man had a huge love towards female breast and so he would do almost anything to watch and observe the breasts which in his opinion were considered as perfect. Since he was a rogue Shinigami, he didn't actually have anything else to do with his life, other than protecting humans from Hollow attacks, so spending some time with these Hollow could be somewhat fun. By now he was kind of tired of killing Hollow, all of them in the human world were boring, these two seemed to be interesting since they did not act the way other Hollow acted. His main goal at this moment was to gain the trust of the female so that he could touch her boobs and he didn't care about anything other than that, at least not at the moment. Indeed, he wasn't in love with this female Hollow, nor did he actually care what he had to do for her, all he needed were her breast. Jacky, or Fang, he was the type of person who would do anything to get what he wanted to get, at this moment he had a single goal and nothing was going to stand in between him and this goal, he would even beat the hell out of people who he knew if they decided to prevent him from touching the breast of this female, they truly were the work of a God. Even after Jacky had regained his memories from the life that he had before becoming a Shinigami, he was still exactly the same, even before death he was a womanizer who only cared about the breast of gorgeous women.

      Obviously the male needed to do something to prove that he is not lying and the only thing that these Hollow actually feared was the sword that he had with him and that was still covered with the blood of the Hollow which were killed by it. Before the female even asked for him to give his sword to her or her friend, the silver haired male had already used his left hand to detach the sheet of his weapon from his belt and he threw it into the air. The sheathed Ouji would land a couple of centimeters in front of the male Hollow just as the female started saying how she would want for him to give his sword away. This way he had made it easier for her friend who did not have to come close to the man and he himself proved that he was being honest. Did Jacky care all that much about killing Hollow? Nope, he did not, that was something that Soul Society was made for and a lot of other races killed Hollow. This silver haired male was just one person, he not killing Hollow would not change anything, and there were many other Human, Quincy and Shinigami who killed Hollow. Not only that, Hollow killed Hollow too, so at quite the rate the amount of Hollow was falling, soon they would be extinct. Well, not really, there would always exist people who were evil and from their evil souls Hollow would be born, the endless circle would be continued. Jacky was not a Hollow hunter, he didn't look for them, and he only killed those who came to him. Not only that, technically he didn't even kill them, he only purified their souls and sent them to Soul Society. Quincy were the ones who actually killed them, not Shinigami. But yes, from their perspective it seemed as if they were getting killed.

      Once the female was done with what she had to say, same with her friend, the silver haired male would say: "A servant is like a Fraccion Pureza-sama, I do what you need me to do. And yes, I mean what I say; as long as I am with you I will never harm another Hollow. I will protect you with my life." While he spoke those words Jacky would place his left hand across the front side of his body, crossing his heart as a sign of loyalty. He did not know what the other Hollow thought about him, nor did he care, but it did seem as if the female was quite curious about him. The whole thing he would finish with: "What do you want me to do? Also, do you want me to wear Arrancar clothing to make it clear that I am your servant or something?"


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    Jack o' Lantern

    Posts : 7
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    Join date : 2012-10-16
    Age : 20

    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Thu Oct 18, 2012 8:35 pm

    Finished. I don't need the Academy stuff in case if you have been wondering.
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    Kenji

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    Ryō : 1933
    Join date : 2012-10-12
    Age : 25
    Location : Michigan, U.S.

    Shinobi ID
    Village: Kirigakure
    Letter Rank: A
    Classification: Jounin

    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Kenji on Thu Oct 18, 2012 11:30 pm


    • History: In your Chuunin area you note Kumogakure, in this timeline Kumo no longer exists, you can switch it to Konoha and I'll be fine. ANBU doesn't exists in Kiri on here either, just say captain of the seven swordsmen or something.
      Also, Nuke-Nin?
    • Being so murderous and crazy wouldn't get you very far in a village ranking system, but I don't expect he was always like that.
    • Ice Release: Falling Snow:: "...cannot be controlled by another person chakra, thus making it not possible for others to use said moisture." You can't simply take away someone else's ability to use said moisture, but you can make it so they have to expend an equal or greater amount of chakra in order for them to regain control of some of said moisture, unless they were an Ice Release user as well. 3-5 meters of visibility would mean it would have to be snowing pretty hard, but I suppose 5cm a post might accumulate that quickly in that case
    • Ice Release: Cloak:: Just add to the description that this effect is caused by the chakra infused snow interrupting Dojutsu techniques, and you could probably add minor sensory techniques as well, but bump it up to a D rank upkeep.
    • Ice Release: Possession:: Same as falling snow, just make it require 1 more rank of chakra to turn some of the ice back into water for use. I take it from your RP sample you were a bleach RP'er, then a good comparison would be Hitsugaya vs. Hallibel, they could play off of each others moves.
    • Ice Release: Snow Echo:: Just bump it up to a C Rank.
    • Ice Release: Snow Clone/Great Snow Clone:: How much damage can they take before breaking?
    • Ice Release: Cannon:: Just state that they cannot use any of this for jutsu until two posts have passed, afterwords it would be similar to Posession or Falling Snow. Also, how far can it reach?
    • Ice Release: Cannonball:: Same as above. Bump it up to a B Rank
    • Ice Release: Freezing:: If a seal is targeting the user? Do you mean Jutsu? If so that's fine as long as you either limit it to A rank or give drawbacks to freezing an S Ranked technique, considering those usually come with negative side effects.
    • Ice Release: March Of Spikes:: Same as Cannon, Falling Snow, ect.
    • Water Release: Gushing Orb:: As long as you state that they can't use the water for their techniques until that technique is no longer under your control.
    • Wind Release: Orb of Tempest:: If you're going to keep that much lethality it has to be bumped up to an A if not S, if yo want to keep it a B then change it to deep gashes and cuts. Also, how fast does it travel?
    • Ice Release: Demonic Mirroring Ice Crystals:: Change all mention of "Haku" to either "the user" or Kamina.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Fri Oct 19, 2012 7:49 pm

    Before I edit these (something that will take me like a minute) I must adress the thing you said about Tia and Hitsugaya. That is Bleach and Bleach differs from Naruto in more than one way. The reason why I added that is simply so that others would not just do something like Tia did to Hitsugaya as things don't go that way in Naruto.

    You didn't see the Third drawing Earth from the First's Mokuton Jutsu, or Sasuke drawing Fire from Boil and leaving only water, or anyone else drawing a Basic element from an Advanced element. That just goes against the laws of Naruto. Ice in Naruto isn't made just out of Water, it has Wind chakra in it as well.

    In fact, if a Water Release user could just use the Water jutsu of their opponents, Itachi could have just spawned those drills/tendrils from the inner side of Kakashi's Water Wall and killed him or Kakashi could have just turned those things into harmless Water.

    I know the difference between Bleach and Naruto quite well, and I am more experienced with Naruto than I am with Bleach.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Kenji on Fri Oct 19, 2012 8:40 pm

    Does the time delay that I mentioned mean nothing? What you stated in most of your stuff pretty much translates to "No one can use it ever unless it's melted by fire or otherwise." I don't expect someone to be able to use your jutsu while you're still using it, but think of it this way. Person A uses Water Release: Waterfall Basin in order to create a source of water for themselves, once that source of water is created than any water/boil/ice release user would be able to draw from it not just the one that created it. What I'm saying is once your no longer in control of the ice/snow then it would be possible for someone else to play off of it, especially someone else that was a Ice Release user. Hallibel vs. Hitsugaya was more instantaneous but it's the same effect, Water->Ice Ice->Water, I even stated that it would be harder for a Water Release user to turn the ice/snow back into a liquid form. It may be true that Ice is Wind and Water based but once your chakra dissipates from it, it is simply the solid form of water.

    With this logic you wouldn't be able to use any water created by a Water Release user once their chakra dissipates from it, even if it freezes due to the temperature. With direct attacks there would be a grace period for your chakra to dissipate, and stating that your chakra doesn't dissipate means all of your ice and snow would require a constant upkeep and would basically be like a Fire Release user stating that his fire never stops burning or an Earth Release user stating that any ground he uses can only be used by him period.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Fri Oct 19, 2012 9:09 pm

    That is not what you actually said in your first check. What you said now is exactly what I said, they can't be used as long as I am using them. Tia vs Hitsugaya is a really bad example, a terrible one in fact as it does not really explain what you were thinking. I didn't mention this, but after chakra is no longer sustaining the snowing the weather goes back to normal and the snow melts, same with most of those techniques as they depend on those snowing techniques.

    I honestly don't want to create an ice armor with a upkeep and then watch while someone just goes and turns it into water and then kills me with it. That is how it would be with Tia and Hitsugaya.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Mon Oct 22, 2012 9:59 pm

    Altered, quite a lot. Changed the personality and history a bit and completely redid the jutsu and got a new clan.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Nocturne on Thu Oct 25, 2012 7:58 am

    Let's hurry to get you approved.

    Gentle Fist Spiky Palm
    I think it should only last a single turn like it's mother technique.

    Gentle Fist Lightning Quake Palm
    I assume this uses a combo of lightning and/or earth some how? If so, you forgot to include them as elements. How does it detect a weakness in properties such as fire, lightning, and wind?
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Sat Oct 27, 2012 7:56 pm

    It lasting more than one turn it is its sole purpose and improvement from its parent technique, so I would like to keep it as it is. The second one works through the usage of Byakugan to analyze the chakra compound of each technique and then negate it through the usage of the users own chakra.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Nocturne on Sun Oct 28, 2012 2:30 am

    Jack o' Lantern wrote:It lasting more than one turn it is its sole purpose and improvement from its parent technique, so I would like to keep it as it is.
    What is this purpose? Why does it last three posts? However, I see a problem with creating 10in chakra spikes at will almost anywhere on your body. It could be used in a way that makes the jutsu OP.

    The second one works through the usage of Byakugan to analyze the chakra compound of each technique and then negate it through the usage of the users own chakra.
    The Byakugan does not have that ability. Neji had used his ability to release chakra from all of his tenketsu simultaneously to disrupt the flow of chakra and break the prison.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Jack o' Lantern on Sun Oct 28, 2012 12:09 pm

    Asking about its purpose is asking why a Fireball technique is used to make a large fireball. Its purpose is to be used in battle, same as any other Jutsu and longer the duration greater the use. How is it OP? Compared to some other stuff that are allowed on this site, such as transforming your body into a element or warp ability, this is not nearly asOP.

    I quote from Naruto wiki:
    When he was trapped by Kisame's Water Prison Technique, it was revealed that the user can also use this technique to target weak points that they see with their Byakugan in order to dispel it.

    It works in that way,Byakugan finds the weak points and that technique then negates said technique.
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    Re: Kamina Hyuuga [done]

    Post by Nocturne on Mon Oct 29, 2012 12:42 pm

    Jack o' Lantern wrote:
    When he was trapped by Kisame's Water Prison Technique, it was revealed that the user can also use this technique to target weak points that they see with their Byakugan in order to dispel it.

    It works in that way,Byakugan finds the weak points and that technique then negates said technique.
    It would be impossible for the technique to work that way as the Byakugan is not capable of detecting a "chakra compound". By "weak points" I believe they mean the downfalls of the technique. Neji saw the flow of chakra and used the information gathered. Disrupting the flow (through release of chakra from all tenketsu) ended the technique and allowed him to strike the clone. Another example: He found the weak point of Jirobo's (Sound Four) earth release prison in a similar fashion.

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