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    Juki, Kyoichi (Finished)

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    Kyoichi Juki

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    Join date : 2010-07-01

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    Juki, Kyoichi (Finished)

    Post by Kyoichi Juki on Thu Jul 01, 2010 11:17 pm

    ~General Information~

    Name: Juki, Kyoichi

    Nickname/Alias: None

    Weight: 232 lbs

    Height: 6'4" Feet

    Age: 28

    Gender: Male

    Appearance:

    Clothing: Kyoichi wears a tan tunic, that covers most his upper body, along with a long sleeved brown shirt underneath. He wears a belt, that holds his katana, kunai, shuriken, and various other shinobi tools. Under that belt he wears blackish pants, along with black shinobi sandles.

    Additional Outfits: None

    Personality:
    Spoiler:
    Kyoichi, on the outside, is a dark, humorous individual in and out of combat and likes to talk, but prefers usually to think instead of talk unless he meets someone with either a good sense of humor or high intelligence. Other then that, he seems like a nice guy with some good ideas and bad past.

    He can remain completely happy and cheerful during a battle, and prefers to do this so he doesn't have remorse later. Sometimes he is reminded of his family during a battle, he turns almost demonic .On the inside, he doesn't know whether to grief or get revenge, kill or commit suicide, steal or give, destroy or create. He's an emotionless, confused and lonely person, but he's never met anyone that could bring out that side of him.

    ~Clan Information~

    Clan Name: Juki

    Kekkei Genkai: The Juki kekkei genkai is called the life eye, or Myoume. It has the power to show how much chakra a person has, where they are directing their chakra, and if there is any elemental damage along with it. It also has the ability see life force through walls, meaning that as long as someone has blood flowing through their body, as long as they are using chakra, and as long as they are sending messages to their body from the brain, he can see where they are. He, as well, can see when a person is giving messages to their body from their brain, but they have to be extremely close to him, as in about five feet. It is a dojutsu, and when it forms in the persons' eyes, stage one is completely black, stage two is completely white, stage three is black background with white pupils and stage four is half white, half black. The abilities follow the stages as directed below.

    Stage one-
    -Has the power to show how much chakra a person has, where they are directing their chakra, and if there is any elemental damage along with it.

    Stage two-
    -Has the power to show how much chakra a person has, where they are directing their chakra, and if there is any elemental damage along with it.

    -See life force through walls, meaning that as long as someone has blood flowing through their body, as long as they are using chakra, and as long as they are sending messages to their body from the brain, the user can see where they are.

    Stage three-
    -Has the power to show how much chakra a person has, where they are directing their chakra, and if there is any elemental damage along with it.

    -See life force through walls, meaning that as long as someone has blood flowing through their body, as long as they are using chakra, and as long as they are sending messages to their body from the brain, the user can see where they are.

    -See when a person is giving messages to their body from their brain, but they have to be extremely close to him, as in about five feet.

    Stage four-
    -Has the power to show how much chakra a person has, where they are directing their chakra, and if there is any elemental damage along with it.

    -See life force through walls, meaning that as long as someone has blood flowing through their body, as long as they are using chakra, and as long as they are sending messages to their body from the brain, the user can see where they are.

    -See when a person is giving messages to their body from their brain, but they have to be extremely close to him, as in about ten feet.

    -Ability to reject any type of genjutsu that is placed on the user, and the ability to nullify the effects of the genjutsu on the body or mind. This is because the eye becomes so advanced in seeing the enemies chakra, brain messages, that it can pick up when a genjutsu is actived.

    Other Special Powers: The traits of the clan is usually very high intelligence. With the Myoume having such special characteristics, the eye can't be removed from the eye socket of the original person without the eye completely destroying itself.


    Clan Symbol: N/A

    Clan History: After chakra was discovered, there was a group of people called
    Juki's. They were nicknamed this because they processed the Myoume and godlike power to predict what their enemy would do, and have perfect counters. Juki translates to demon in English. They were a very powerful group, for they would work for the highest bidder and basically have whatever they desired. They were unmatched, and had a very small empire around the world. They were known for their genius in science and knowledge, for they would capture any piece of information for any sum of money or for the life of any person. The Juki were also know to be genetically changing themselves so they would be able to carry down the Myoume easier and other traits, such as blue eyes and black hair. For unknown reasons the Juki soon retreated into hiding into the now known country as Amegakure. They have remained very well hidden, and they don't even exist in most ancient records. Juki are very, very rare and if one ever leaves the compound they usually die before reproducing. The leaders of the Juki clan in the past have been Kyoichi Juki the first, Kazuma Juki the first, Doushi Juki, Kazuma Juki the second, Kazuma Juki the third was killed, so Kazuma Juki the second replaced him. There is only two recorded leaving of the compound, one by the name of Kazuma Juki the second, and another by the name of Kyoichi Juki the second, his son. Kazuma Juki returned after a long period of training and recording the history of the outside world, taking in all the information he could possibly do so before returning to his home.

    If you go deeper into the Juki's history, you will find out that the founder of the clan was in fact Kyoichi Juki but not the one that is living to this day. He is believed to simply be his descendant and nothing more. He was originally thought to be dead but soon found to be outside of the Juki compound alive and becoming quite the criminal. Kazuma, the father and previous leader of the Juki clan was also thought to be dead but was just recently returned to the compound and seems to be leading the clan yet again


    Ability Summary: The bloodline is a vastly powerful tool, but only can become useful when in stage three or four. Used a correct way, this bloodline can be the reason you live, and the reason you die.

    ~Rank/Village Information~

    Classification: Missing ninja

    Letter Rank: A

    Village: None

    ~Skill Information~

    Skill Specialty:

    • Main: Ninjutsu
    • Sub: Taijutsu

    Elemental Affinity:

    • Main: Fire
    • Main: Earth
    • Sub:

    Special Characteristics: Kyoichi is a very intelligent foe, beyond all measures. His speed, execution of jutsu and simple, yet powerful jutsu could allow him to take down entire villages. His chakra pool is vast, much larger than any shinobi on his level, save for bijuu holders and those with the eight gates. Perhaps his most unique quality is his battle code. "Never retreat, Never surrender"

    ~Jutsu~

    S-ranked
    Spoiler:
    Name: Master Chakra Control
    Rank: S-rank
    Type: Kinjutsu (Forbidden)
    Description: The user gains the ability to do whatever they can think of, as long as the person has enough chakra to do said action. It has the same principle of something like tree walking no jutsu, or water walking no jutsu, just on a higher scale. If the user attempts to control elements that they have not trained in before, then it takes much more chakra than normally to use said element. It ends in fifteen (15) posts and cannot be used until another topic is made.

    Name: Fire Dragon
    Rank: S-rank
    Type: Ninjutsu -Fire
    Description: This jutsu creates a huge nine headed dragon. This dragon could easily go through a village's gates and take a chunk out of the village itself. The fire is almost lava to the touch. It lasts five posts, and cannot be used for another fifty replies, unless there is a change in topics.

    A-rank
    Spoiler:


    Name: Technique: Silently Dispatch
    Rank: A-ranked
    Element: None
    Type: Taijutsu
    Description: The user wraps the enemy in a thin layer of chakra, not allowing any sound to leave their body. This can be done from a decent distance, but it cannot be done being more then a hundred feet away, and that is if the shinobi is skilled in chakra control. The user then approaches the enemy and either simply knocks out or kills the person in a various number of ways. It could be a stab to the spine, snap of the spinal cord, cut of the windpipe and plentiful other ways. The user then hides the body by splitting the ground with their chakra and burying them if they are dead, and placing the ground back. The Juki are usually decent enough to mark their grave with a kunai, or some marker if they lack one.


    B-ranked
    Spoiler:


    Name: Konoha wall breaker
    Rank: B-rank
    Type: Taijutsu
    Description: This taijutsu move focuses chakra into the users leg. The power is enough to put cracks, dents in village walls and bridges and can make a good size crater in the ground. A direct hit to a person would be deadly. Very, very deadly.

    Name: Fire defense
    Rank: B-rank
    Type: Ninjutsu -Fire
    Description: This acts sort of what Garaa of the desert had with his sand. A few things different though. Kyoichi has to active it himself and mentally tell it to move, but it remains passively burning on his fire-proof clothing, or if the need arises, the user can active a small chakra around their skin, blocking any and all damage that could be caused by the fire.

    C-ranked
    Spoiler:

    Name: Fire swarm
    Rank: C-rank
    Type: Ninjutsu -Fire
    Description: The user spits out flame balls like crazy, they explode on impact and they go randomly across the battlefield. Good against a group of ninja and an stuck in place shinobi.


    Name: Fire stream
    Rank: C-rank
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Description: The user lets out a stream of fire from the mouth. It can be useful for burning something without putting a lot of chakra into it. It can also be used to burn someone quickly, putting on easy and deadly damage to the opponent.

    Name: Technique: Anti-Ambush
    Rank: C-ranked
    Element: None
    Type: Ninjustu
    Description: The user lets chakra drift into the ground, and depending on the amount of chakra used, the user can now feel vibrations in the ground and on trees. Usually, a small amount of chakra can make a 20 foot radius. A decent amount, 100 feet. A good amount, 200 feet. A large amount, 500 feet. Most of your chakra, 1000 feet.


    Name: Technique: Stealth
    Rank: C-ranked
    Element: None
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Description: The user wraps a thin layer of chakra around the persons' entire body. This blocks any sounds or smells to come from the user. The drawback from this is that the user cannot say anything or hear anything. This forces groups of Juki to use a hand language that they learn at a very young age.

    Name: Technique: Entrance
    Rank: C-ranked
    Element: None
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Description: The user lets chakra sink into an object, and the chakra rips the material apart evenly, big enough to make a hole to crawl through. It can later be placed back together, to leave no trace of ever being there. Though, the person must remain in very close proximity to the place where they made the hole. This works with literally any material that isn't a gas, but it cannot last very long without taking a toll on the users chakra.



    Academy Jutsu
    Spoiler:

    Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu
    Rank: Academy Student
    Element: None
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Description: This technique needs handseals. A basic skill involving quickly switching the body with another plant, animal or inanimate object that has been previously prepaired. This is used to confuse the opponent momentarily and create an opportunity to attack or possibly escape.

    Name: Bunshin no Jutsu
    Rank: Academy Student
    Element: None
    Type: Ninjutsu
    Description:
    This technique needs handseals. A basic technique which creates false clones of the user. The clones
    are used as a diversion while the user attacks. The clones are
    incapable of attacking and disappear if directly hit.

    Name: Henge no Jutsu
    Rank: Academy Student
    Element: None
    Type: Genjutsu
    Description: This technique needs handseals. This genjutsu causes the user, including any equipment he may be carying, appear different. You can appear up to 1 foot taller or shorter. You may appear thin, fat, or inbetween. Otherwise, the extent of the apparent change is up to you. You could add or obscure a minor feature or look like an entirely different person. This jutsu does not give the user any special ability to mimic mannerisms, nor does it change tactile or sound aspects of the user.

    ~History/RP Sample~

    History/Background Story:

    The Birth, The Aftermath

    Spoiler:
    Kyoichi was born into a family of a caring, naturally protecting mother that wanted nothing more then her young boy to succeed in life and find a nice wife, have kids and live peacefully. His father wanted his son to grow up to be written in the history books as a changer of the world. By defeating the rouge shinobi that were running wild across the world, looking to destroy this beautiful world of ours. Of course, his mother's wish would never come true, because at age two and a half. His mother died of child birth, trying to have a second baby and the child ended up dying because the umbilical cord got wrapped around it's neck, choking it to death.

    Kyoichi wasn't old enough to understand death, but he did cry for awhile, screaming mommy. His father ignored his cries, for the first few days. But after awhile he joined a shinobi team a week later. Leaving Kyoichi with the mothers' side of the family, which was a shinobi clan at the time. The Juki's. He was left with an uncle and aunt, who had one other child that was his cousin was a boy, and was a bit younger. The first few months away from his father and mother tore his world apart. Crying himself to sleep every other night. Ignoring everybody except his uncle. He noticed that he was much kinder and gentle then his aunt. Kyo stopped crying by the age of three, and started interacting with other people again.

    Realizing his shinobi blood

    Spoiler:
    At age 13, after many years of schooling he dropped out, getting a job at a weapons shop. After all of this time, he realized that his father was now high up in the shinobi world. And he knew now that his uncle was a secret rouge shinobi, his aunt didn't know. But the two boys did. Kyoichi looked at his uncle like he was the coolest guy ever. After a few months working at the weapons shop, he bought a small katana. Saying that he was picking it up and paying for it for his uncle. The weapons master nodded and fetched it off the wall. His uncle got one of the boys to buy the weapons for him. Too risky if he went there himself and his wife found out. And after he tricked the blacksmith, he started training with it. When his uncle caught him trying to cut a apple in half with it, he struck Kyo for the first time in his life. Said nothing, and left him be. He was confused, and hurt. He felt as if this was a new punishment.

    After a week or two, he began training with it again. He began cutting branches and apples. His uncle didn't seem to notice. His strength slowly started to build, and soon he was quick and could use the blade easily. When his uncle caught him the second time, he stuck him, and then again. Kyoichi yelled at him " Stop!" His uncle went to hit him again, Kyoichi swung his sword at him. The elder disarmed him in a few seconds. He then let Kyoichi go, and said. " Do you want me to teach you how to fight?" Kyoichi was surprised for a second, but quickly agreed. He picked up his sword and he took out a sword equal to Kyoichi's. They both began sparring every other day in the wood shed.

    After a few months of sparring, and the learning of taijutsu and ninjutsu, his uncle began starting to tire after fights, and he began getting a scratch or two from his own sword. One night, his uncle sat down with him and looked him in the eye. " I can't teach you anymore about fighting. Even though I am better then you, I have much more experience. Something you'll gain when you join your own Shinobi team." He paused, then continued. " What do you want to learn from me?"

    Over the next few years, his uncle taught him everything he needed to know about being a shinobi. He taught him laws, ways to travel off the beaten road, of a few current rouge shinobi's that were famous. And he lightly touched the topic of shinobi history. They sparred every few days to keep Kyoichi's mind sharp, and Kyoichi practiced his jutsu whenever he could. Kyo continued his job in the weapons shop, learning about local shinobi in his clan, what kind of weapons there were and how to haggle. He learned his now famous cunning from these years of his life. His uncle had managed to teach him the fire element and earth element after four or five years of training.

    Only one man to cause a world of pain

    Spoiler:
    When he was finally 20, he had received the weapons shop in the will of the dead owner. Owed a scroll to the wrong type of shinobi. And to his surprise, he also left the scroll with him. His uncle was gone now, his rouge shinobi ways had called for another mission. After a few weeks, the gold he received from the weapons shop was in a trunk in his room. Buying what was needed, and keeping a good pool of the profits. It was good work. He was gaining enough money to live a month off a weeks salary. When the shinobi that had killed the owner heard this, they came into the store and demanded all of his money, plus the scroll that he had, otherwise they would burn and kill his family. Kyoichi pulled his own katana out of the case, and said. " Try me, motherfucker."

    The rouge shinobi left the shop to start killing his aunt and cousin, and looting the scroll. Kyoichi was left with two of the other shinobi. He jumped over the counter, when the two armed themselves with a huge axe, and the other had a hammer. When they both swung at him Kyoichi ducked, stabbing the hammer man in the gut. It pierced him, going out the other end, but it got stuck in his body when he fell on the ground. Screaming in pain. The other man smirked, and swung his axe down at Kyoichi's head. Kyo used both arms in an X to block it on the hilt before the metal came down to end him. Kyoichi kicked him in the legs until he tripped, and he disarmed him. Taking the axe, he decapitated his enemy before the man could rise. He dropped the gory weapon and got his katana back. Running out of the store, he headed toward his aunts' house.

    But alas, he is not superman. For he was too late. His once peaceful home was burning with his aunt and cousin inside of the house, their faint screams of pain could be heard from outside of the house. The rouge shinobi laughed, holding the scroll, but then saw Kyoichi and gave a sickened glare. " You little weasel. Still alive?!" He slipped the scroll into a wooden box and disappeared for a second, then reappeared, and pulled his sword from his case. " Come get me!" Kyoichi looked from him, to the burning house. A part of it collapsed, the fire roaring with delight. Then, looking back at the man, he let out a blood chilling yell, his shinobi blood unleashing itself. The rouge shinobi laughed, and Kyoichi ran at an unmatchable speed, his katana in his right hand. Taking his weapon and raising it above his head, he stabbed the man through the chest on impact to him. He stopped laughing, and grabbed the sword by the hilt, blood forming at his lip. Kyoichi toppled over him and began beating the life out of the shinobi. Even when his skin grew pale, a pool of blood under him, Kyoichi continued beating on his face. To the point where he knuckles bled, and cartilage stuck out. He beat him until the pain in his hands became too great and he heard another shinobi yell at him. His vision flickered, no longer feeling anything, and the only sound he could hear is the fire flickering and snapping in the background. Then his head hitting the ground, and his eyes closed.
    Recovery

    Spoiler:
    Pain... the first thing he felt. Pain. Voices. Where am I?... " Where am I?" More pain. Hurt to talk. He heard a reply, but his ears couldn't find words in them. His vision flickered to life, and a man was standing over him, dressed in a black shinobi outfit. " Can you..me?" Kyoichi shook his head, too tired to even talk. His throat hoarse and dry. After a few hours, he found out from the man in the black shinobi outfit was from the nearby clan, and that his aunt, cousin and home had burned. He still had his sword. Plus the weapons shop. After a few days of recovery, he was released with his hands healed all but the scars. Kyoichi shook his head, crying softly. He headed toward his uncles wood shed. The only thing that didn't burn.


    He rummaged through his uncles things, trying to find something to take with him to remind him of his now in past life. He knew what he would become. A rouge shinobi. He trained for it his entire life, he knew how to do it. Plus, he knew there were more shinobi like this, people who kill in cold blood for money. He could get a swing at them before they could kill anyone else. When he was about to give up, his hand hit a box, it seemed wooden. He pulled it out, and blowed the dust off it. It seemed to have a small lock on it. Kyoichi opened it by smashing it against the ground. When he opened it, there was a scroll laying in it. It was a jutsu scroll.

    Kyoichi looked at the scroll. Picking it up, he examination it. Without another second of hesitation, he opened it. It had a S-rank fire jutsu in it, and saw that it was from his uncle. He wanted to learn it, but knew he couldn't. He had never learned a S-rank jutsu in his life. But something told him to try it. And he did. Standing up and doing the seals a few times, he got a handle on it. Then, he tried summoning the fire from his belly. Mixing chakra with the force inside of him, he tried and tried to push it out. For a few seconds, he felt nothing. Then it hit him, and he opened his mouth, suddenly it was burning. And fire came out! Pure, fire! He screamed with himself, trying to cool off his mouth. When he tried to summon saliva, more fire came. Which he spit out again, which caused the shed to catch on fire. But Kyoichi was too busy with his burning mouth to realize the entire shed was burning around him. With a mix of pain and shock, he blacked out.

    The faked fade to black

    Spoiler:
    .... More voices.. He could only make out a few. The pain was gone, but he heard. " Pains...heart..such...good guy." Then a female voice. A very familiar voice. " He recently lost.... Took his own...burning himself...live..." It was like he was in a small room, and even though it was stuffy he wasn't hot. He was stiff, but too tired to move. After a few more minutes of mindless sad chatter, he fell asleep.

    BOOM, a noise woke Kyoichi. He suddenly looked around, unable to see anything. It felt as if his lungs were burning. Not from fire though, from lack of air. He tried to kick the wall in front of him, but to no avail. When he frantically lashed out at the wall, fire came to each of his hands. At first he freaked out, trying to swat it away. But it wasn't hurting him. He was amazed, had he finally been able to use the fire element? Even if he did, he still needed to punch the wall down so he could breath. So, he let the wall have a good one, and the wood snapped in half. He tried to climb out, but soil and bugs blocked his entrance. What the hell? Kyoichi was clueless of what was going on. He used his fiery hands to dig through the soil, trying to get above it. Kyoichi reached the top of the soil, and punched through it. He pulled the ground apart, putting his head out into the air. He sucked in the oxygen. " I fucking...Love...trees!" He climbed out of the hole, and looked around, breathing heavy. He realized he was in the local grave yard. Kyoichi looked at the tombstone he was next to.

    HERE LIES KYOICHI
    Died at age 20, he burned himself alive in his uncles wood shed, this young man had recently lost his aunt and cousin...

    Kyoichi had read no more. " They thought I was dead..." He stood, looking in the hole he had climbed from. " They buried me alive?!" Kyoichi felt like screaming. Without hesitation, he began running to the chapel. They always show the recently dead's belongings on display before giving them away. He needed to get his weapons and get the hell out of this place.

    Look before you jump

    Spoiler:
    Kyoichi busted through the chapels doors, heading for the display room. He ran up and melted the glass in the display case, taking his katana while still having his hands on fire. Surprisingly, it didn't melt. That's good. He went for his fire jutsu scroll when he heard a voice. " Who's there?! A thief!! How dare you steal the recently deceased belongings!" He head footsteps toward him, he grabbed his katana and stabbed the man in his chest, without even looking at him, then kicking him to the floor. Turning and grabbing his scroll, he was about to run out when he heard a faint voice call his name. Kyoichi slipped the scroll into his pocket and headed to the fallen body. He then saw the in shock, tear fallen man of his childhood with a stab wound in his chest. His uncle.

    He dropped to his knees, heading for the wound, but his uncle grabbed his hand and looked him in the eye. " I knew I should've never snuck up on such a fine shinobi as yourself." Kyoichi looked his uncle in the eye, tears dripping wildly. " I'm sorry, I'm so sorry. I.. mean I... I didn't know." His uncle nodded and spoke softly. " Not your fault, I shouldn't have walked up to you..-" His uncle coughed out blood, it was now dribbling off his chin. " I love you Kyoichi, like my own son. You were always destined to do great things." Kyoichi rested his head in his uncles chest, crying without control. Kyoichi shook his head, then looked at his uncle in the eyes " Uncle, I-"He saw that his uncle was looking at the ceiling, a pool of his blood on the carpet. Kyoichi didn't and couldn't leave, not without burying his uncle. He took a spade and picked up his uncle, heading toward his own grave.


    The Unforgiven Vagabond


    Spoiler:
    Leaving his clan compound that day, Kyoichi entered the shinobi world with little to no knowledge of any current day technology, any shinobi villages, clans, or even the Akatsuki. He wanders the land, with no alliance to anybody and practically up for the taking if anyone could get to him first.

    Roleplay Sample: From another Naruto roleplay site

    Link to topic: http://narutorpgsaga.forum-motion.com/akatsuki-f21/akatsuki-introduction-open-to-all-akatsuki-t1007.htm

    Hm. The day had been long for the man, trekking the distance from his current residence to the Akatsuki 'hideout' per say. He had only very recently joined, he had even yet to receive the infamous red and black cloak that was, for some reason, only shortly known about in the shinobi world. Information was half the battle, he always said, and if you have no information, then you cannot win. Considering the factor that the world knew little to nothing about them, Akatsuki had a major upper hand in the silent war that raged on. Every step that the six foot six inch man took, was as silent as night and it gave him an eerie feeling to him. As big as he was, he was still just as graceful and light as a kitten.

    His eyes, at the current moment, were an ocean sparkling blue and made them as innocent looking as possible. His skin, was lightly tanned, his black hair just seemed to be thrown together, and his body was well taken care of. All of this, to off set people. To deceive them long enough to trap them, like a Venus fly trap. His clothes, were casual enough to tell people that he wasn't a shinobi. The only thing that could let people know of his true intentions would be his offsetting smile or his odd personality. Then again, he thought back to why the Akatsuki wanted him to join in the first place. He wasn't very infamous, even if he was an A-rank missing ninja. Then again, why did he join? What was his goal? And how would it tie in with the Akatsuki?

    The time of day was late afternoon, in just an hour or two, the sun would be gone and the lovely maiden of night would sweep in. Kyoichi couldn't enjoy the night more than he currently did, even if he tried to. It was genetically programed into his brain to love it, to use it. He was bred for war, he was created for a purpose that he seeked to fulfill. He wouldn't accept failure, or death until he completed this goal. If only the world knew, if only they knew. He continued on the path, slowly, toward the meeting point where he was directed to. Kyoichi looked at the sky again, and thought he should make it there before the night settled in. Being early wasn't looked down upon, he hoped, as he quickened his pace from a simple walk to a jog, which would be an all out sprint to most jounin. His feet easily guided him on and off the terrain, expertly leading him through unknown territory as if it was his backyard.

    When he reached the location which he would meet the Akatsuki leader, and possibly, other Akatsuki members, he stopped almost suddenly. He, before, was just a black blur moving through the forest and small patches of treeless areas. Now, his every detail was visible and he seemed to arrive either barely early or on time, because he could sense another chakra source, one quite large as well, now that he focused on it. His eyes slowly scanned he surrounding area as he waited for someone, or something to show themselves to him and hopefully it was the Akatsuki, and not something he would have to either kill or massively injure. Maybe, he was just being paranoid. And maybe, a thought like that would get him killed.


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    Post by Echo on Fri Jul 02, 2010 9:19 pm

    Speed is not a skill specialty.

    Add a real paragraph to Clothing.

    You need a letter rank, and "wandering ninja" is considered a missing nin.


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    Post by Kyoichi Juki on Fri Jul 02, 2010 11:13 pm

    Missing-nin (抜け忍, nukenin; English TV "Rogue Ninja") are ninja who left their village without the intention of returning, often because they have committed criminal acts or to pursue other personal gains. The ninja village that they are from will often try to track them down and eliminate them. Kirigakure has a special hunter-nin task-force whose only objective is killing traitorous ninja. The ninja organization Akatsuki is composed mostly of S-class missing-nin, except for Nagato and Konan, who are the leaders of Amegakure. Most of the missing-nin throughout the series are antagonists.

    Obviously, Kyoichi is not a missing ninja because he never belonged to a shinobi village to begin with. And a letter rank is dealt to known shinobi by a kage, or higher up shinobi. Since nobody knows of Kyoichis' existence, yet, he cannot have a letter rank.


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    Post by Echo on Fri Jul 02, 2010 11:28 pm

    Like i said, fix what is needed or you wont get approved. No need to link wiki crap to me because i already know what it is. This is a Naruto site, not a free naruto universe, so add the stuff.


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    Edited


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    Post by Echo on Sat Jul 03, 2010 12:06 am

    Your only allowed 2 S rank jutsu. Only kage rank ninja can have 4.


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    Modified


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    Post by Echo on Sat Jul 03, 2010 12:15 am

    Name: Master Chakra Control

    Controlling another element would be something you couldn't do with simple raw chakra

    Also, i see Genjutsu in your Jutsu. Remove those.


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    Normally, I wouldn't, but it's not really controlling them, just moving them. It wouldn't work with fire, lightning, or wind, or any mixed elements such as wood or ice, but it would work with water, and earth because Kyoichi is literally simply wrapping chakra around it and moving it. Not actually controlling it.

    Also, is there a reason I am not allowed genjutsu?


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    Post by Echo on Sat Jul 03, 2010 12:36 am

    Because your skill specialties are ninjutsu and Taijutsu..i also see some Kenjutsu techs in there that need to be removed.


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    Post by Kyoichi Juki on Sat Jul 03, 2010 12:55 am

    I cannot have a certain type of jutsu because I don't specialize in it?

    Also, why are you nit-picking? These are extremely small details that I cannot even understand how it would majorly affect anything.


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    Because it's the rules here. Now make the changes or simply don't get approved.


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    Changed


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    Post by Echo on Sat Jul 03, 2010 1:19 am

    For your Kekkei Genkai, it says your pretty much immune to Genjutsu because you know when a Genjutsu has been used...that wouldn't make you resist a Genjutsu at all. You would know your in one, but ould still have to break out of it yourself.


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    Post by Kyoichi Juki on Sat Jul 03, 2010 1:41 am

    I didn't explain the process in which somebody with the Myoume would go through when a genjutsu attempted to activate, but I'll do that now.

    The Myoume recognizes that someone is attempting to activate a genjutsu on them. Here's a quick explaniation to how genjutsu are activated:

    instead of attacking the victim's body, genjutsu techniques manipulate the flow of chakra in the victim's brain, thus causing a disruption in their senses.

    The user knows that someone is trying to activate the genjutsu, so they can then block the chakra from entering their brain, and the genjutsu is never activated. They block the chakra from entering their brain by simply wrapping a shield of chakra around their brain.


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    Post by Echo on Tue Jul 06, 2010 1:27 am

    Name: Numb stab

    Thats a Kenjutsu please remove it



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    Post by Kyoichi Juki on Tue Jul 06, 2010 4:56 am

    I edited again.

    Small request: Can you find every problem you see with my profile and put it into one post, instead of drawing out the process and making it harder on everybody by posting up a problem, let me fix it, then find another one and repeat?


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